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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
I pack up all my things At last I remove my ring No longer will I be bound To walk on sacred ground I am out on my own Like a leaf from the tree blown I am free to roam Away from this home On the wiind my spirit soars Nothing but open doors Appear along the way Nearby a butterfly plays I feel light as the warm air After accepting your dare I meet your puzzled gaze As we continue to the next phase In time truth will be revealed And at last my heart will be healed I am ready come what may Looking ahead to another day When I will wear a smile Although maybe not for a while Strength will be shown A new love will be known ---------------------------------------------------- Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
OH WOW!!! Jennifer, this wayyyyy by far your best work........so haunting yet.....it has a hint of hope and a sense of renewal.....I am very proud of you.....writing is a very big part of healing .... I know this from experience......fell better soon my friend |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LoneWolf~ Yes ! Yes ! Yes ! 'I am ready come what may Looking ahead to another day When I will wear a smile Although maybe not for a while Strength will be shown A new love will be known' Forward ever ... backward never Glad to see the strength ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Jenn Fly baby girl and know I am here to help be your wind when you need it.... |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Wolf, you do it again. Lovely expression I feel the heartbeat in this poem you write.  Coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 08-14-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I pack up all my things At last I remove my ring No longer will I be bound To walk on sacred ground I am out on my own Like a leaf from the tree blown I am free to roam Away from this home On the wiind my spirit soars Nothing but open doors ====================== wings to fly Jen... you've earned em ... excellent writing girl... stronger with every line... fly high... later-amazing-wing-span-gator  jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Wow! Straight from your heart my friend, beautifully expressed. Take care! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I was gonna say, "you go, girl" but sounds like you already went...and aren't you just amazing!!! You've my admiration... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
you are a brave girl! You're poem is wonderful, I am here for you always. Kathleen |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Jen, this is wonderful! A very powerful piece!!!! I wish you luck, my friend. You have taken the first steps and they are the hardest. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Jenn,...we keep missing eachother.  This IS the first step,...and you've written a most powerful poem to show that you've taken it....that you're not going to allow yourself to fade,...that you are going to SHINE for forever and a day!!! This is so great,.....this strength you display here. Take care JGurl. *Peace. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Spread those wings and soar into the clouds....lovely expression of release.........You have no boudaries..the sky is yours. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Powerfully written LoneWolf! Such positive hope and inspiration dwells within these lines ... I could feel the dawn of your new day! Nicely penned! Best wishes and hopes for a bright and happy future, /Kit |
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