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The "Deciding" Factor
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The "Deciding" Factor |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada 
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The "Deciding" Factor Oh, have I made the right decision? Lord, it "feels" so right ... I've pondered and I've questioned this, With all my strength and might. So many times I've queried, "Am I ready for this step?" So many sleepless nights where I Have laid awake and wept. One moment, I am sure of it, Another moment ... not; Conversing back and forth within My tattered train of thought. I need to do what's right for "me", These answers I pursue, While weighing out the pros and cons, For is this right for "you"? I've sheltered many feelings, Kept them deeply held within; It's easy to be selfish, And decide upon a whim. But circumstances vary, And I must include in this, The consequences that surround The essence of my wish. If future dreams of happiness Depend upon my thoughts; Then surely this deserves the time And answers I have sought. And through this journey in my mind, As back and forth, I sway; The final, clear conclusion has Arrived to me this day. No longer do I have my doubts, They vanished instantly ... The moment I looked in your eyes, And saw "your" love for "me". /Kit McCallum |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
aaaahhhh Kit, this is so sweet and tender....the eyes are the true path to the heart and reveal much more than any words.....well written my poetic friend...me likes much. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gosh...I wish this could happen to me...it's so hard to make decisions, especialy concerning love. I am going through some torture now and can relate tot his poem. Very well done!! |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
Kit; What a heavenly romantic poem! I only hope that all your dreams come true! love, ellie Summers haunting melody that awakens the butterflies, calling them to join the dance in their silent song of praise to God. eL |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
sometimes you arent given the chance to make the decision...its taken away in the touch of a hand, a glance met and held...wonderful thoughts |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
~Mark: 'Tis in the eyes indeed! Thank you Mark  ~Passing Shadows: I'm glad you enjoyed passing Shadows! Thanks! ~Ellie: I hope they come true too Ellie ... thank you! ~Paula: Decisions are not easy, but we are so fortunate when we can think things through. Thanks Paula! Much appreciation to all, /Kit |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi Kit, Well done and very nice to read. Keep writing and I'll keep reading. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Kit, wonderful piece. We keep trying, don't we, and after all the hurt and pain when it (love) hits again, it's all new again. Great gift He gave us...Love, that is. Wish you much. jwesley [This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 08-13-2000).] |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
It's pretty tough to gaze into a pair of loving eyes without melting great poem Kit |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kit~ The eyes speak ... The heart listens. When things come my way - I let them. When love looks my way - I hold it tenderly. Beautifully thoughtful ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful, Kit! The decisions that we make based on love for another are usually the right ones! Denise |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
I love this poem and the way in which you entitled it.. It makes me think back to when I told my boyfriend, "I love you"..sighhh this is truly a great piece "my love is my motivation my love is my inspiration perception of this poem is your interpretation" -- me |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes..yes..I believe in this with all my heart. Of course you want them to say they love you...but when you look into there eyes and see the love...it is so intense and real...James |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
The moment I looked in your eyes, And saw "your" love for "me". ........ The eyes speak what the heart feels and what the lips are tentative to say... and they do speak more truthfully ... Kit, Very well written poem, this one... regards, sudhir |
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oh2beme Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 215NV USA |
I can surely relate to this. Sure wish I knew the story behind this one, LOL. Very nicely done Kit, this is one great piece. But then, what else would one expect from your magical pen? |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I was reading this entire poem in anticipation of the twist you were obviously going to put at the end....and you played it straight!  How sneaky! I loved it....  |
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Alle'cram Senior Member
since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816Texas |
Terrific from beginning to end. After reading this, I feel like I know you. A very good job. Marcy |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Awwwwwwwwwww, the ending was perfect. The rest is so very true, I was just in "a situation".........the sad thing is I fear I have made the wrong decision as I decided with others hearts in mind and not my own. Your ending has made me ponder....... This was very beautiful poem and there is nothing that makes you more sure then your loved ones eyes..... Take Care Jenn E |
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