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Precious Thoughts |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now 
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“PRECIOUS THOUGHTS” It was the very first day of our very first date, we were sitting on top of that big Ferris wheel. Oh, you remember don’t you, when we were there, and our hearts decided to make their own deal? We were so very young at the time, hardly seventeen and eighteen were we. We were just out of baby diapers, when we started growing a foundation for our tree. We sat way up there high in the sky, wow, we were rocking to and fro! I reached over and kissed you on the face, the way you looked at me, I thought you’d tell me to go! I don’t know what it was that grabbed me, perhaps it was the seat that caught me by the cheek! But you accepted my ring when I gave it, and my heart skipped two awfully long beats! And then I thought, oh my goodness, I’ve only known her for a day, what did I do? Darn it, now she’s got my ring, does she want me to marry her too? Well you know, it really did happen, we were married within that very same year. Boy, we were just crazy in love at the time, but maybe we jumped in too soon, with no fear. We settled down and bought a cute little house, out in the beautiful countryside. We even made two babies for us, and we both smiled with so much pride. Then one day we started to grow apart, we both knew we were in a jam. But it didn’t seem to matter whatever we did, as too much water had gone over that dam. So we got together and talked it over, and we both decided to go our separate ways. Two broken hearts remembering the togetherness, that we had during each of, those very special days. Bill Charles |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Bill.... As long as you keep writing, I will forever be a fan! I loved this story of young love even if it didn't last. It was bittersweet, with just enough sweet bites to save for later! Beautiful writing! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Young love is wonderful...even when it doesnt last...such a lovely sad tale |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice Bill..remember this song? "They say for every boy and girl there's just one love in this whole world and I know that I've found mine.. Young Love...first Love.." So many times it turns out like this... but it was wonderful while it lasted.. and lovely memories to savor....James |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi Sunny.... Thank you for coming by, and for your considerate and precious comments about this writing of mine. Hi Paula, I appreciate you coming by to read this sad tale of young lovers. Thank you so much. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi jmlee12345, Thanks for coming by, and yes, I do remember the song, I could never forget it. James, I know of the memories that you speak of. Best of....my friend. |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
HUGS |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
RainbowGirl...To return them would I smile. |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
HUGS again then sweetheart..  I know, no words need be spoken... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Bill...I wish that young love could last forever....I guess it does for some, but sadly all to often it fades away as youth blends into maturity and people change with time...However there is nothing on the face of the earth that can be compared to that inital rush of love through the heart and soul.....The realities you have described here so well are also precious memories of yesteryear...I think this is Fab Bill! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
I read this one twice and now take the moment to reflect on poetic words you've shared. Admittedly this is a sweet poem which tugz at heart at begin yet at the end a sigh and tear is shed. Very nice poem indeed thank u for this read! Coco |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Two broken hearts remembering the togetherness, that we had during each of, those very special days. if only all can end that way....am very contemplative this morning Bill ~~soft tears to you M |
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ddgoose Member
since 2000-07-25
Posts 250Baltimore, MD, USA |
Bill Very sad poem indeed. Two babies & a house to boot. Glad I stopped by. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Ahhh RainbowGirl...no words, but words of thanks for coming by. Hi ethome, I too wish that young love could last forever, but yes, sadly it does fade. At times this is a b..... Thank you very much for your kind comments about this tale of truth. Hi CocoBaci, Thanks for visiting with me and sharing some of my thoughts. And thank you for the kind comments. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi MMoonchild, I'm glad that you came by for a visit. And once again I am grateful for your sincere feelings. Hi didi, I'm glad that you thought highly of this writing. It was good to see you. |
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