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Open Poetry #9

Come in, the waters fine

Michael G
Senior Member

since 2000-06-25

Posts 579
Nashville

0 posted 2000-08-12 08:49 PM

Another street
in a downtown
filled with bodies
that want to take
flight from their
own little brand of
hell that has fixed
on them this day.
Come out
from your sour
temples that you
have created
and thus have
doomed you into
a blinded submission
that tempts your
anger and blinds you.
Not that
being blinded in
this day and age
have anything less
to do with poverty
or the simple fact
that we all
have just forgot
how to care.
And the hounds
of the day
those that tremble
your waking nightmare
filling you with venom
that you choke on
come out to creat
their heavens on
the pain that you feel.
So walk
your incesiant walk
leave the flying
to my mind
as I trip you
making you finally feel
like the human your
supposed to be.
And the hell
with time and space
for that really
is nothing
but Einstien's
interpretation
of what god wants
you to feel, and that people
is to love.

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

1 posted 2000-08-12 10:08 PM

remarkable emotion expressed with angst. I don't know how the ending fit, but at least there was love mentioned.
There is a lot of pain here, I hope it's not internal.
quite a piece.

Kathleen

BreyerRose
Member

since 2000-08-12

Posts 55
Easton, Pa USA

2 posted 2000-08-12 10:48 PM

I read this piece 3 times. I can sense alot of anger, but beyond that, there is some hope. Isn't there? Very thought provoking. I really liked it.< !signature-->

Hugs and Kisses,
Paula

[This message has been edited by BreyerRose (edited 08-12-2000).]

Michael G
Senior Member

since 2000-06-25

Posts 579
Nashville

3 posted 2000-08-13 11:38 AM

Not really alot of anger just of being pushed around, and thankyou both for reading........

Paula Finn
Member Ascendant

since 2000-06-17

Posts 5546
missouri

4 posted 2000-08-13 11:42 AM

WOW guy...I like the way you PUSH back

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