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Meadowmuse
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0 posted 2000-08-12 08:15 PM



A Thirsty Thief



For sorrow is a thirsty thief
who drains her heart of tears
He waits until the day's relief,
and with the night, appears

He creeps, familiar, to her rooms
and slips into her bed
And when she lies for slumbering
he whispers in her head

A dream, she thinks, has wakened me
and now I cannot rest
While sorrow snickers silently
from out his pillow nest



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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2000-08-12 08:18 PM


Oh, Claire~
How sadly you tell the tale.

Unsuspecting sorrow ... begone !
~*Marge*~


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2 posted 2000-08-12 08:20 PM


claire, you could not have possibly written this for me...but somehow you did...if nightmares plague you also, you've my heartfelt sympathy, and also my gratitude for expressing this so exquisitely.
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3 posted 2000-08-12 08:46 PM


Claire,

Such sadness...very well written, my friend.  

Michael





Michael G
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4 posted 2000-08-12 08:51 PM


such sadness in words that have great depth.... wonderfull....
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5 posted 2000-08-12 09:13 PM


Claire--This is how it is...and you have captured it.
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6 posted 2000-08-12 11:20 PM


Sorrow knows no time. . .
Night hides his rhyme. . .

Sing on gentle one. . . sing on. . .

-------------------------------------------------------



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--Victor Frankl


Meadowmuse
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7 posted 2000-08-13 05:31 AM


Marge, a sad tale, yes...but so real to me. Thank you for reading this, my friend.

serenity, thank you. Nightmares visit far too often...I am sorry to know that you know this.

Michael, your kind words are so appreciated...remember that.

Martie, thank you. This is how it seems, sometimes.  

Sven, night hides so many things...thank you, my friend...

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


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8 posted 2000-08-13 07:32 AM


That's how it happens......and not only the hers...this is a wonderful description of the depth of sorrow creeping into the heart.
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9 posted 2000-08-13 07:36 AM


Just dropped back to say....I always love your poem titles....they are so inviting... just for the fun of it have you ever considered going back over all of your titles and trying to write a poem about them...I'm just enjoying the morning and enjoying doing some reading at Passions....it's just an idea?
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10 posted 2000-08-13 07:57 AM


Excellent writing, as always, Claire.

Denise

Bill Charles
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11 posted 2000-08-13 10:20 AM


Good morning Claire,
Sorrow tells this tale, and memories from reading this writing of yours, bring back the thief.

Meadowmuse
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12 posted 2000-08-13 11:23 PM


ethome, thank you for including my poem in your morning enjoyment. As to your inquiry, the thought of making a poem out of my titles actually had never occurred to me, but it is an interesting idea. Don't know when I'd have a chance to do it, but perhaps some day...  

Denise, thank you, friend.

Bill, Good evening...thank you for reading this. We must do our best to outsmart the thief, my friend...take care with your memories.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


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13 posted 2000-08-13 11:48 PM


You would not believe it if i told you, so i will just say........Fantastic Poem and the timing is eerie



Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".



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14 posted 2000-08-14 10:34 AM


Prometheus, thanks for reading...I must admit, I am curious about why the timing was eerie. My e'mail's up there...  

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


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15 posted 2000-08-14 11:27 AM


so sad...and how easily you seem to pen thoughts that touch each and everyone of us...many many nights this thief has graced my pillows
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16 posted 2000-08-15 09:32 AM


Claire...
such a great metaphor to use...

sorrow's tale fantastically told...

Grief- you are but a thief...


regards,
Sudhir

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17 posted 2000-08-15 03:54 PM


Paula, Sudhir...thank you both for letting me know you read and appreciated the message of this little poem. Grief is capable of fierce thievery, to my way of thinking. Thankss very much.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


Elizabeth Santos
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18 posted 2000-08-15 04:12 PM


This could only come from you, Claire. It is so beautifully written, a wonderful poem
Liz

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19 posted 2000-08-15 06:15 PM


your pen must be umbilicaled to a 55-gallon ink drum ... how prodigious you are ... a true poet's poet ... thanks Claire
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20 posted 2000-08-15 06:44 PM


For sorrow is a thirsty thief
who drains her heart of tears
He waits until the day's relief,
and with the night, appears

He creeps, familiar, to her rooms
and slips into her bed
And when she lies for slumbering
he whispers in her head

A dream, she thinks, has wakened me
and now I cannot rest
While sorrow snickers silently
from out his pillow nest


You have created a work of pure sadness and the analogy is so well seen.  Excellent write Claire.

Meadowmuse
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21 posted 2000-08-15 10:46 PM


Liz, Mark, M.A. ~ thank you, in earnest, for your kindnesses. So glad to know that you enjoyed reading this small piece.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


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22 posted 2000-08-15 11:03 PM


Thank you for finally putting a finger on that manace who invades my bedroom oh - so often.  Great piece, creative topic and very good imagery.

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Meadowmuse
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23 posted 2000-08-17 08:06 AM


ThUnDeRkYsS, thank you for taking time to read and comment. It is unfortunate that you can relate to the content of this piece, but also gratifying that folks are able to understand how I chose to depict sorrow here. Thanks again for the encouraging note.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


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