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Lost Dreamer
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since 1999-06-20
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Somewhere near the Rainbow

0 posted 2000-08-12 07:44 PM


Masterpiece Of You

I want to paint the canvas in hues of our love,
trickles of dancing colors blending their way
creating an impression of deepest emotions.

Inside my soul, rainbows capture small dreams
dressing them with tender scenes to uncover,
my heart a bountiful playground for attention.

I'm drawn away within a kaleidoscopes vision,
a taste of destiny's sweetest summer pleasure
before my eyes tempting my palette with delight.

Each day another brilliant hue becomes visible
as my mind creates this masterpiece of you,
where soon within time this painting will be framed.


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Meadowmuse
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since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263

1 posted 2000-08-12 10:00 PM


"I want to paint the canvas in hues of our love,"

Lost Dreamer, what a beautiful first line. Such an imaginative theme, this masterpiece of yours. The rest of the poem is just as sweet...just that the first line was perfect with which to lead the reader forward.

~ Claire


Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


WhtDove
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
Illinois
2 posted 2000-08-12 10:02 PM


Gloria this is exquisite! I love every word of it! It captured my attention and left me in a kaleidoscope of awe!     

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The will of God will never lead you, where the grace of God cannot keep you.


Jenn E
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since 2000-08-02
Posts 589
Kelowna, BC, Canada
3 posted 2000-08-12 10:17 PM


Oh How I enjoyed this. This was such a pleasing read. I am so glad I came here, your sweet words have left me admiration. You have written a very beautiful poem indeed.  
Jenn E

Denise
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4 posted 2000-08-13 06:54 AM


I think I have a new favorite of yours, Gloria...nope, I'm sure of it! Very very beautiful!

Denise

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
5 posted 2000-08-13 06:56 AM


What beautiful expressions of love in your picture images of this person. Very well done!
doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
Virginia
6 posted 2000-08-13 10:09 AM


gloria, the poetic voice of a woman with much love to share is so very clear here... your writing gets better and better...

LOVE the interior rhyme in these two lines:
"Inside my soul, rainbows capture small dreams
dressing them with tender scenes to uncover"

this line is FABULOUS:
"I'm drawn away within a kaleidoscopes vision"

wonderful romantic verse, my friend!

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
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ireland
7 posted 2000-08-13 11:39 AM


what a beautiful picture you have painted. Each image is colourful and dazzling. perfect poem.

"Beyond all this good is the terror,The grip of a mercenary hand,When savagery turns all good reason, There's no turning back, no last stand,"I.Curtis

Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
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missouri
8 posted 2000-08-13 11:45 AM


what a beautiful palette you paint with
Nan
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9 posted 2000-08-13 12:26 PM


"My mind creates this masterpiece of you"...

Nice, Gloria - this is a beautiful poem... Our minds are capable of wondrous art, aren't they?

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