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You, My Guitar
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You, My Guitar |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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(Terza Rima Sonnet?) You recumbent on the bed, expecting The fierce hot fueling of your fires, Timeless beauty before me spreading I see, the instrument I possess, Strings that vibrate with frequencies Heard in heaven with each caress. Know that with true loving touch, Now firm, now delicate, now insistent I bring forth the music I love so much This lovely narrow-waist shape, I hold My fingers press the strings and frets. Stroking just so, to and fro, so bold. Your loving look, your sounds reveal, I've strummed the right chord, pain to heal |
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Honey Bunch Member
since 2000-08-08
Posts 99South Africa |
Wilfred...I think in my next life I'd like to come back as your guitar! I enjoyed your words tremendously! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
WilfredYeats~ Wow ! What a lovely serenade ... so softly strummed. Thanks for introducing me to the name for this piece - how lovely is it's form ... and so lovely the name ~Terza Rima ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"Strings that vibrate with frequencies Heard in heaven with each caress." Lots of heart and soul and music vibrating in this poem..James |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I love this...just astonishingly sweet and tender...read like an acoustic melody...(and I'm just guessing, but is she a Martin?) |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
HB - (grining here) We could make some great music - I suspect - Thank You MT - the rigorous form of sonnets allows a few forms - this one worked for me for this one Thank you JML - you're too kind - thank you Serenity - (chuckling here) my main instrument is Piano -best I do on guitar is 3rd man theme ~G~ but it lent itself to the poem - and I love acoustic Thank you |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I believe this is the first of your works that I have read, but suffice to say, it won't be the last. A wonderful work that rings in beautiful harmony  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wil--You play with such tender passion this harmony of words...very pleasurable!! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
this is the most passionate guitar I've ever heard played, either that or my minds in the wrong place tonight! Kathleen |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
The guitar, and this poem, are excellent pieces of construction and beauty when placed in the right hands. Very good work here... |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Wilfred.. Now this is a perfect piece of writing as far as I'm concerned. I wrote one about my synth!! Great job here...... (All we need is bass and drums!) Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Hooty - (may I?) I'm glad you found harmony - Thank you so much Martie - I don't really claim a guitar playing ability - but I know the sounds I like evoked - Thank you - you know hoew much I appreciate your responses Kathleen - Passions are good - they remind us we're alive still -  I love your work for reminding me tooBalladeer - If you heard me on a guitar - you'd question if the 'right hands' held it. I'm glad you thought the right ones wrote it - Thank you |
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JSage Member
since 2000-08-25
Posts 91Nashua, NH USA |
If your writing says anything about the type of man you are you could put Don Juan to shame. You are a truly exquisite writer. -Jes |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I can place my hands on an old Dobro...if you'll place your hands on my piano... nice nice nice... |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
 Jes -  (blushing) Thank you Karilea- If you don't have piano music - all I've memorized is September Song, St Louis Blues, and a few bars of Clair de Lune If you strum any of these - else let me know - I'll steal some music ~G~ ~If you let yourself be absorbed completely, if you surrender completely to the moments as they pass, you live more richly those moments. ~ Anne Morrow Lindbergh ~ *~ wilfredyeats@hotmail.com [This message has been edited by Wilfred Yeats (edited 08-29-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah Mr. Yeats, I cannot play the guitar, I can just get my hands on the Dobro...but I could accompany you to Clair de Lune, and in that regard, feel free to visit this ... if you want... if you have time... /pip/Forum30/HTML/000978.html and enjoy... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
A very tender playing of music, well done! Corinne |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
 So - That WAS you I saw playing yer geeetar watchin' the sun rise up in Acadia, eh?...  |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
A very fine piece of writing.... ahhhhh ... to love a guitar and phrase it with such style and music!!! YES!!! Thank you for posting this. I haven't read your work until now and I'm impressed with your command of the language and your ability to evoke emotion. Well done. ~ all you can really ever expect out of life is a good apology and some decent poetry ~ |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hello Wilfred, When I saw the title, I stopped dead in my tracks, as I also play the guitar. Well done, for my guitar will always be a treasure to me. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Bill, your guitar playing sounds very sensual, very emotional, and your writing, I am coming to discover, is often very metaphorical. Lovely, tender thoughts expressed in this multi~layered piece. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Karilea- I think the soft notes of the Clair De Lune- were the first "Adult" phrases I chose to memorize - - perhaps for the same reasons you wrote your beautiful poem - a Double thanks Corinne- ~a soft smile to you~ - Thank you very much Nan- if you heard music from me near Bar Harbor - it was from a keyboard - My guitar playing is pathetic ~S~ (I loved the animation~S~) Doreen- Humble thanks - your words are an inspiration for me to try even harded Bill Charles- I wish I did play the guitar - well enough to treasure it - but I only know what it CAN sound like played well - I'm limited to the keyboard - btw - listen if you can to a new guitarest on the music scene: Tommy Emmanual I think you'll like him Claire- "Metaphysical"? - I truly am humbled by your words - Thank you ~*Keep love in your heart. A life without it is like a sunless garden when the flowers are dead. The consciousness of loving and being loved brings a warmth and richness to life that nothing else can bring. ~ Oscar Wilde ~ wilfredyeats@hotmail.com [This message has been edited by Wilfred Yeats (edited 08-29-2000).] |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You always make such beautiful music my sweet... oh and you play well too hehehe |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Paula - That was just the right - now imagine both hands ~G~ (jes kidding) Thanks Paula |
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ladysixstring Member
since 2000-07-27
Posts 374 |
You've captured the experience perfectly... "I've strummed the right chord, pain to heal" and with that... smiles to share and love to feel!!! Wonderful!!! -jaimie Website: www.ladysixstring.com |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
For you to say that -as a guitarist - to me who only listens - I'm totally humbled - Thank you so much ~S~ |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
The title got me.....let alone the rest of this beautiful peice. So tender and sweet, I can hear music as I read. Your choice of words here were perfect. Jenn E |
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Wes Utica Junior Member
since 2000-08-12
Posts 28California |
Will, I'm seeing the results and rewards of all your hard work and studying as you plumb your muse. This is quite lovely - but whose picture is that? |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
As a guitar player myself(not that good.lol) I had to stop and read this. It is wonderful the way you bring the desire to the page from your pen. Excellent creation. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I had to come sit at your feet and listen one more time...only one hand hmmmmm...mayhaps I can induce you to use two? Yesterday is gone...tomorrow may never happen...we only ever have today |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Jen - I used MS word - (not Wordperfect) - I guess I just got lucky ~S~ - thank you Wes - Thank you - Sad to say the pic is me. (12/4/99) know a good plastic surgeon? Mark- I wrote this originally as a 'violin' poem - but changed it to guitar at the last - I cannot play either one BUT - thank you - I glad a struck a chord for you.Paula- I never could keep my fingers properly pressed on the right frets - you may have to settle for one hand. Thanks Again |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
There are many wonderful lines in this poem, AS far a sterza rima sonnet, I know nothing about that. I do know I love my guitar. This poem is superb Liz |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Liz - Thank you -- I would die without a keyboard - it is one of the places where I can relax (most of the time) I love music - and especially appreciate acoustic guitar it too is what I go to for peace. as for terza rime - 4 triplets with 1st and last lines rhymeing and a couplet at the end rhyming - no biggy - should have the meter too ~G~ |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Yowsers...to be that guitar Bill...(if I may be so bold) this is a wonderfully written poem that seems to strike all the right chords. Nicely done |
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