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Mornin Ralph" ( revised a little from#6 )
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Mornin Ralph" ( revised a little from#6 ) |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London 
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"Mornin Ralph" ~~~ You wake up in the morning your face a ghastly fright cheeks a little hollow and your gills a deathly white Your eyes sunk back lost without a trace And your tongue you can't describe the taste Your twisted spine makes your stomach sore and the woozing waves engulf the bedroom floor ~ You bend down through the wooze to grope for a shoe And up comes Ralph with some of last nights brew You hear the giant phone as it starts to ring and you make a beeline for the big white thing ~ You try to lie back down but you get back up then you crawl and shake and all kinds a weird stuff You're called to breakfast it's about to start You contemplate death spreading stomach art ~ ... You swear ... ... you take an oath ... You'll Quit and save your Health ~ HA HA ... Yeah Right ... ... next week ... "good morning Ralph" ~~~ |
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T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
Yea I been there once or twice... Even took swore the oath a few times...  but not any more...just got too old i guess... Tony  |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I too have been there many times and with age comes with the realization that I just cannot bend to porcelain goddess anymore and still have the strength to get back up. So I QUIT>>>>>>>thank the stars for that. Nice read and easily related to it. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
worshipping the porcelain god is not a pleasant way to start the morning... no... i prefer a nice savory omelet or maybe poached eggs with asparagus and hollendaise sauce and a couple of mimosas on the veranda... ralph and i don't get along... matter of fact... he makes me sick! 'twould be nice to have someone to share this fine breakfast with but... not ralph... nope *grin*... your poem is well crafted... almost too vivid... bad place to be... sorta shook me up just reading it... have seen people go through this and it's not a pretty picture but you painted it like a poet fine job |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
This is good. After a long hard day at work I needed this to give me a good chuckle. Thanks.  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
hehehehe....haven't you learned your lesson yet, Rex? I remember this one! Thanks again for the chuckles! Denise |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Great read Rex.....lol definately some smiles here |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
OMG did you bring back some memories! I remember these days working two jobs...wondering how the hell people got up with nasty hangovers and went on. All I wanted to do was lay down and die. And sure enough praying to the porcelain gods sure never stopped it the next it came around! I'm glad I don't go through that anymore! LOL I don't miss it. Thanks for a good laugh Rex! <*\\\>< The will of God will never lead you, where the grace of God cannot keep you. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I guess it's just me, but I expected this poem to be somehow related to that cartoon with the sheepdog and the wolf...??? *laughing at myself* Rex, I enjoyed your humorous approach. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Ugh! You definitely covered the graphics wit this one! Clear, clean imagery, oh yes! Not for the squeemish or hungover! LOL Corinne |
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