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I wish upon a meteorite to get you back! - inspired by Chris's poetic format... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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I wish upon a meteorite to get you back! Thinking of all that can be done and all that can't be done is a trick learnt out of obscurity and loneliness created by a sad event. A tragedy that struck me like white lightning, a blue electric jolt, a streak of pain from an announcement that you made: "I don't feel the same way any more. It is not you, but is me who is to be blamed. I'm sorry. With Love, as ever as always". Thus, you had signed on that fateful day leaving me marooned, under a darkened sky, like a rudderless boat, an aimless dart, thrown into shark-infested seas. Pain and anguish were the feelings on that night since when sleep has often feared to come upon me. On this day, the anniversary of our pre-marriage divorce, I still cringe with the same pain gazing at an empty sky, hoping disdainfully for a shooting star to land on my doorsteps, and an angel - you, to climb out of your ethereal chariot, and land into my empty arms joining me in a love-regained kiss. I wish upon a meteorite to get you back! ~~~ |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Fantastic Offering Sudhir...Might I ask what one might expect from a "wish upon a meteorite?" regards, jamie |
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Bruce Junior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 15Internet, Cyber-Space, Everywhere |
AWESOME Sudhir! I love it!!! This was incredible: ...when sleep has often feared to come upon me. As was this: On this day, the anniversary of our pre-marriage divorce... Wow! Muchly impressed my friend! Welll rendered! Chris |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Sudhir Iyer, a big wow here. The poem and presentation were wonderful. You pegged Christopher's format...... So may I be the first to say your a chip of the old block...lol Bravo. Parker |
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Dusk Treader
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Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Enjoyed this one muchly Sudhir, a very unique format, as I have not seen Chris' but very well written, I like! [This message has been edited by Dusk Treader (edited 08-11-2000).] |
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Bruce Junior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 15Internet, Cyber-Space, Everywhere |
AWESOME Sudhir! I love it!!! This was incredible: ...when sleep has often feared to come upon me. As was this: On this day, the anniversary of our pre-marriage divorce... Wow! Muchly impressed my friend! Welll rendered! Abe |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is very good. I guess there's only one font that will allow you to do that huh?  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Well done with this one. You've got a lot of great lines here and the format is great  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sudhir~ Imitation being the best form of flattery I'd say you've done it in quite good form Such fun to cavort the across the avenues of entrepreneurial forms for presentation So stunning to see our poets inspiring us toward new heights of enlightment in view of the fact that we are all of the family of the circle of friends that make up the friendliest poetry family on the internet ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Sudhir, A poignant piece, and as always, wonderful to read from your perspective. There are other stars waiting to be wished upon, and meteorites are only dead rocks. Peace, friend. Coirnne |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
WOW Sudhir, not matter what you turn your pen to the results are always amazing. This one is no different. "Beyond all this good is the terror,The grip of a mercenary hand,When savagery turns all good reason, There's no turning back, no last stand,"I.Curtis |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
ditto, ditto, ditto, ditto, ditto And one more thing, You are one heck of a writer Liz |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
My turn to say WOW a zillion times... What wonderful people you all are... Thanks a lot... from deep within my heart for supporting my take on a new form... Many regards to all, Sudhir |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
WOW, finally I get a chance to put a proper response to all you wonderful peoples kind words... I have been away and couldn't find much time... I am still behind by 2/3 days in reading all the wonderful poetry out here... wonder when I will be even... Jamie, Fantastic is a splendid word of praise... and I guess where the meteorite falls, it brings rare and exotic 'other' world stones... Thank You... for me if it brought love, it would be the greatest gift of all...Bruce, thanks a lot... AWESOME is well appreciated...Parker, I am all smiles at the "chip of the old block"... Thanks Abrahm, I am glad that you liked this... Thanks Bruce, I am honoured that you came for a second visit... and I am glad that your viewpoint did not change... Thanks Poet deVine, I guess so... well actually any fixed size font will help the BLOCKING factor..  Thanksruth, thanks, your "well done" means a lot... Marge, Thanks a lot for your most lovely compliment... Corinne, poignant feels great to hear... thanks and I will remember to wish upon a star next time... Brian, I think it is like this: no matter what I write, you are there to read ita nd appreciate it with kind words... Thanks Liz, one heck of a writer - now thats some praise... I will keep it deep within my heart... Thanks My regards to all, Sudhir. |
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jfilius Junior Member
since 2000-08-14
Posts 29 |
Its hard for me to comment on a true profesionals work! I realy enjoyed it! The sence of a little sweet revenge is a nice touch! Heck you hit a "home-run" John |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
a "home-run" thanks a lot John...regards, sudhir |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Sudhir-I will be back to this as I have many thoughts on your work once again....as you can see I am quite busy with the passing out of medals and I am also trying to get to EVERYONE of the posts that were not of the challenge as because of my challenge many were swept away and I did not see that coming. I will be busy pulling up ALL of them so please bear with me and know that I find this so intriguing and not one to be answered without clear thought. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
ooops sorry Mark, I never go to this one to thank you for taking a bit of your precious time... on this one... (and an excellent challenge you came up with...) any time, my friend, any time, just choose to drop by and read whatever you like... regards, sudhir |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Oh My! This has to be my all time favorite of yours...and that's really saying a lot as I love so many of your pieces. I had to go back and read this one several times and then I finally just printed it out. It's wonderful! Penned Perfection! Great one, Sudhir! --You can either take me as I am...or you can watch me as I go.-- |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
All time favourite, Tennesse... WOW looks like the blockhead finally made some headway... or some tailspin... Thanks a great deal for your kind words of appreciation... regards, sudhir |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I always stand back in awe of your work...and this one my friend has the same effect...you have an amazing talent for weaving words~ |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
This is worthy of a bump to the top!!!!! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
butterflies~ and I am honoured to hear your kind words of praise and appreciation... its feels so good... can't be expressed adequately in words.... Thanks a huge bunch and tennessee... I feel bumped thanks a lot.... regards to all, sudhir |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sudhir this is just outstanding work and the format is excellent! Very impressive! Once again my friend you have penned a work of poetic art! |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
ethome, Thanks aplenty, my friend... from deep within my heart... regards, sudhir |
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