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Drizzle in the Night

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Professor Gloom
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since 07-23-2000
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of Depression


0 posted 08-11-2000 10:34 AM       View Profile for Professor Gloom   Email Professor Gloom   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit Professor Gloom's Home Page   View IP for Professor Gloom

Drizzle in the night,
Rain falling in mists so slight,
Hiding all the starlight,
Except for in your eyes.
Drizzles carry on,
The moon could well be gone,
Carried still within our song,
And the melody still flies.
Raindrops falling down,
A crescent moon in your frown,
Eyes cast toward the ground,
As words reach to you;
Sorry starry night,
Shines without its light,
Burning hiding from sight,
There’s nothing we can do.

Then she goes,
Wondering off into gray,
In the night,
From his sight,
Knowing words he could not say
While near her,
Feeling fear
As it binds his heart tightly,
Vital part,
Aching heart,
Emotions burning brightly.
There she goes,
Leaving him with just the gray.

© Copyright 2000 Aszard Drazlom - All Rights Reserved
Sunnyone
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since 07-06-2000
Posts 5483
Staffordshire, England


1 posted 08-11-2000 10:41 AM       View Profile for Sunnyone   Email Sunnyone   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunnyone's Home Page   View IP for Sunnyone

Prof. Gloom...
              Maybe the rain will stop, and
              he'll get a second chance to
              say what he needs to say.....
                     Maybe not....
              Anyway, I felt this one, and
              appreciated your fine writing!


Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!


Professor Gloom
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2 posted 08-11-2000 10:57 AM       View Profile for Professor Gloom   Email Professor Gloom   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Professor Gloom's Home Page   View IP for Professor Gloom

Thank you, Sunny1,
I am glad you enjoy my words.

Gloom
redheart angrybraids
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since 04-16-2000
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honolulu, hawaii


3 posted 08-11-2000 12:13 PM       View Profile for redheart angrybraids   Email redheart angrybraids   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for redheart angrybraids

"a cresent moon in your frown"
how lovely, yes the king of gloom, but so sweetly you are. i love the way  you used the words in this poem.

Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids
Professor Gloom
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4 posted 08-11-2000 12:59 PM       View Profile for Professor Gloom   Email Professor Gloom   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Professor Gloom's Home Page   View IP for Professor Gloom

Thank you, redheart angrybraids,
I just mix all the word I know up,
and sift them through my emotions onto the page,
glad you can enjoy them.

Gloom
Meadowmuse
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5 posted 08-11-2000 09:17 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

"Hiding all the starlight,
Except for in your eyes."

Ah, this was a nice touch. Somber, sad, beautiful...I'm enjoying your work.

~ Claire


Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

Professor Gloom
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6 posted 08-12-2000 06:47 AM       View Profile for Professor Gloom   Email Professor Gloom   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Professor Gloom's Home Page   View IP for Professor Gloom

Thank you, Meadowmuse,
Somber, sad, beautiful, you say,
short descriptives are the most meaningful,
your comments are pleasing to read.
Thank you, Claire for them.
tracie66
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since 01-18-2000
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7 posted 08-12-2000 07:26 AM       View Profile for tracie66   Email tracie66   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit tracie66's Home Page   View IP for tracie66

Oh so grey a picture you have portrayed prof gloom....such a well written piece well done.
Tracie~


Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

miscellanea
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OH


8 posted 09-18-2004 03:53 PM       View Profile for miscellanea   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for miscellanea

Professor,

  Easily, I could have copied your entire poem.  It's gorgeous...  This brought back memories of a visit to the Metropolitan, where I viewed the painting under glass.  Somehow, it lost something in the transition of historical preservation.  Still I remember it well.

"As words reach to you;
Sorry starry night,
Shines without its light,
Burning hiding from sight,
There’s nothing we can do."

  from the keyboard of MisC:

Sorry starry night,
Swirls of passioned breath;
Inertia spun bright,
Strokes softened beneath
History's plate of glass...
              
             ~miscellanea~

 
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