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I Miss You
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I Miss You |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England 
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I Miss You My arms are lonely My eyes are blue I'd sleep all day But I'd dream of you I miss you in the morning I miss you at night I miss your lips I miss feeling alright My heart is dreary My lips are unkissed I'd speak your name But I'd say you're missed I miss you at dawn I miss you at noon I miss your love I miss seeing you soon My legs are leaden My heart is sore I'd try to smile But I can't anymore I miss you as I work I miss you as I sleep I miss your care I miss hearing you speak My soul is crying My fingers are bare I'd reach for you But you aren't there I miss your voice I miss your touch I miss your smiles I miss you much too much |
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Björn Junior Member
since 2000-02-08
Posts 23Münster, Germany |
Hello Marsha, this one is beautyful. I´ve just lost my love (after 8 years) and all i can write is that this poem says exactly what i feel right now. I hope that you´ve written that without really having the same problem as me. If not, I wish you all the best and hope that you will cope with your pain. Björn |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Marsha I love the style you wrote this in...and I get the message...sorry you are missing someone special to you so much...take care..James |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Thanks Bjiorn, it's something I think we all have to go through, but boy can it smart! I think that's why we try to hide our hearts so often, because so often they don't get treated as they should. James thank you, missing him is part of the healing. So I wish it would hurry up and heal. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
very nice Marsha ... you display your emotions quite well in this poem ... I knew the feeling ... although it was over twenty years ago  Rex |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
very touching right from the heart... sad though, you have to let the firefly of hope in your soul to keep on being kindled... take care, regards, sudhir |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Rex thank you your poetry can and does bring a smile. One of those periods when you just have to get through, no matter how! Thankfully I have your and the other poete here to help me, So thank you one and all. Sudhir, I'll try to let the firefly back in, thanks for thought. Thanks also for your words, you know I love your work, so thank you. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Marsha.. Boy, do I know this feeling..... You did a great job on this, especially since it's a subject that brings out some pretty rough emotions when you write about it. I can feel your pain in this one and I just want to say: Don't give up, write, let it all out...... we're here!! Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Sunny thank you, I know that here at least I'm understood, and that helps. So thank you. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
OUCH!!!!!! Your pain is felt way down here it is. You share your heart well and I know this feeling well as I am sure alot of us do. Well written and openly honest. You have a hug of poetic friendship coming from this end. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Mark thank you, love your work by the way. I could do with all the hugs I can get. So thank you loads |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
What a heartfelt poem Marsha...in my current relationship me and my boyfriend are separted by many miles and this poem embodies all that I feel towards the situation...this was a beautiful poem great job, it was wonderful |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
JnR4eva, thank you, sometimes it's more than mere miles though sometimes it's something else.  |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
I really liked the flow of this poem, it was great! |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
You give just to get back but often you lose You live just to sit back and take a big bruise We try just to feel good and look past the bad We cry cause we then should to spill out the sad Keep giving and stay True let your heart be seen Keep living and love you dont be scared to dream Then someday I do believe for all who stay strong That one day you'll be relieved of every sad song By someone as caring and true as yourself That someone will Love you, and give you himself  Warm {{{Hugz}}} to you my dear. It is one of the most difficult things in life to deal with, but after all the hurt and emotions... also the most rewarding, because you get paid back ten-fold with good from the right person when you find them. Very heartfelt and hits very close to home :~) Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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Artistic Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 107Colorado/Rochester, NY |
The flow and the emotions entwined into the poem was beautifully done... I only hope you shall find the light and heal someday. Until then... hugs and hugs. ~Artistic~ "Dreams are the touchstones of our characters" -Henry David Thoreau |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Lakewalker, thank you for your support. ThUndeRKYsS, That is the most touching poem, thank you, the hugs are appreciated too. You're quite right it's a case of get through how you can. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Thank you Artistic, there is light, and hope, and soon I shall find it. Hugs are always welcome, so thank you. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I think we're all relating to this one. You poem hits a chord right where it hurts Good work Liz |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Thank you Elizabeth, this is one of those times that everyone no matter how old or young goes through. The support and kind words from my friends on this site help. Although I still say, either Rex, Sunny, Marge, in fact almost any other poet would say it better. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
You did a splendid job displaying emotions here, I think it's one of life's most traumatic situations and this is a wonderful description....great work! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Ethome, thank you, you know how I feel about your work so praise from one, who in a couple of sentances, capture emotion so perfectly is praise indeed. Thank you |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
marsha..  love hurts, no doubt about it...you wrote it well.. i think we must all get thru this part to really appreciate the good stuff dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
I hope, that's all I can say, I hope! Thanks Dee. |
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