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Michael G
Senior Member

since 2000-06-25

Posts 579
Nashville

0 posted 2000-08-11 02:47 AM

You have your will,
your demons that pass,
forever you shall ride
that haunting you must have.
Of desperate streets
that lend a sacred view
of nights enjoyed
with drunken eyes askewed.
To the lane you shall
always call your home,
of presents taking
you fill your soul with now.
At 23, you were used
and allowed your trip to wane,
the trip that follows you
is the one who new your name.
Did she bless you for you patience
or simply laugh at your will.
Did she crumple your foolishness
like those before you fell.
So here you stand
on your corner throne,
twenty cents left to go
for the Night Train you could own.
And this night that gives you
your solitary pain,
is the night that will haunt you,
from this day foward again.

Rosalind Palafox

Registered

Member
Posts 88

1 posted 2000-08-11 02:53 AM

i am drunk too, forgive my poem.... but please read it, i liked yours, hardcore..
Rosie

MMoonchild
Senior Member

since 2000-07-13

Posts 1715
PA

2 posted 2000-08-11 02:54 AM

Did she crumple your foolishness

love that phrase...Michael
~~softly
Maureen

Marina
Member Elite

since 2000-02-10

Posts 2245
Pickering, Ontario

3 posted 2000-08-11 09:29 AM

Very interesting piece of writing Michael. You have such a way with imagery!

Marina

It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

4 posted 2000-08-11 11:38 AM

Did she bless you for you patience
or simply laugh at your will.
Did she crumple your foolishness
like those before you fell.

Killer lines.....You have such a wonderful talent and a very interesting take on things. This was a wonderful read to me and your flow of imagery and presentation are mixed for the ease of reading.

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

5 posted 2000-08-11 12:02 PM

Hi Michael...
           Funny thing about chasing demons..
           They catch you in the end!!
                Enjoyed your writing!!

Today is a gift....
That is why they call it
'the Present'!

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