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What Do You See....... |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Look into my eyes, the window of my soul. The place I tell no lies, the place that I am whole. Do you see silent cries, of the horrors untold. The pain of the lies that cause me to withhold. Do you see the fears that I've never let go. The unshed tears, that my cheeks will never know. Do you see the child I keep hiding in the the darkness. She only escapes in my sleep when I am defenseless. Do you see the chains that hold me down. Do you see the pains within which I drown. Do you dare to see all that is true? Or do you turn from me because of what hides in you. repost from #6, |
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Artistic Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 107Colorado/Rochester, NY |
So haunting... I can relate only too well for I've had to hold so many things back...! You described it beautifully. Nicely done!  ~Artistic~ "Dreams are the touchstones of our characters" -Henry David Thoreau |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Ohhh, this is nicely done. The things we hide inside.......but the ending was absolutley perfect. Beautiful work here. Jenn E |
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T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
oh...bdc...i don't even know what to say...this is so good... what do i see? a lot. a WHOLE lot! hugs to you! Tony |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Do you dare to see all that is true? Or do you turn from me because of what hides in you. I really enjoyed this Butterflies...I have been there..and at times am there ~~soft hugs Maureen |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
you ask me what do I see I will tell you NOT what I see ... but what I know I know you are a poet and in your words your heart shows I know that you are strong MUCH stronger than they can see, and I know your time to fly has come and I know this butterflys gonna fly free. ****** this poem effects me so deeply tonite, as do you. I know how hard these words were to come by. I admire your strength and courage. love ya my SS me There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
OOHHHHHHH my dear sweet Holly---I wish I could not see that which lies within your eyes. The pain that caused all this anger(frustration) must be immense. You have vented well with this one and I hope it helped even if only a little. Keep venting and remember....there are those out there who will listen and finally take notice. You have penned this all too well and now please know that you are not alone in this. Hugs to you sweet "SIS". |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
What can I say but Oh how good this is! Well done. Behind the masks we all wear what is there, beautifully drawn. Love it!  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ButterfliesDC~ I missed this before - I'm so glad I caught it this time. What words of wisdom are these - 'Do you dare to see all that is true? Or do you turn from me because of what hides in you.' Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Butterflies ... absolutely beautiful thoughts! The ending was so masterfully written, just lovely! Best wishes, /Kit |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
What do I see? Great writing, from the heart and soul. BloomingRose |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
I liked this one because it reminds me of how i feel about myself. I really liked the last lines... Do you dare to see all that is true? Or do you turn from me because of what hides in you. Very nice. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
My dear friend! You already know my feelings on this and how deeply it touches me, remember that your butterfly catchers are always here. God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
What do I see?---Back on top is where I see you need to be. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
What "I" see is hauntingly beautiful. Just wonderful. Michael |
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Tennessee Angel Senior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 661Tennessee |
Ah, BDC! I can relate so well to this piece. I love this one. It may very well be one of my favorites of yours. Thank you so much for sharing this. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Thank you for all your replies and kind comments...I appreciate it more than you could know. My apology for not thanking you sooner~ |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
BDC, How did I miss this before? My dear sweet friend oh how I know the feelings behind this one. I wish neither of us could relate to any if it. Great writing. So much feeling. WE will get there sweets!! I know it. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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