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MMoonchild
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0 posted 2000-08-11 12:15 PM


Staying Awake or Still Batty After All These Years

She's staying awake tonight right here
Will pass up her dance of dreams.
They have come in flight to shadow her fears
The winged mice, brown-black, as she screams.

Petrafied, since early on days
Hysterical she was tonight
As passions were rising her words and her thoughts
Instead, now shes tearing their sight.

First one then another they mimicked her cry
Swooping to see what she reads.
Jumped up, sensed unwanted, this company now
She ran to the backdoor in need.

Said he'd be out there, was watching the game
A lie, another was told.
Too scared to return, she stood in her stead
This she was not very bold.

No shoes on her feet, just a T-shirt and shorts
She noticed his car, it was gone.
Sighing, and shaking, it's 10:30 now
He shouldn't be very long.

Oh yeah, that's right, if traveling the bars
Who knows how late he'll be out.
So she walked in her barefeet all around town
Crying within, giving shout.

She knew  where to find him, he wasn't next door
Walking and seething she trecked.
Inside of one and another of drink
'Til the last that she reached was correct.

Now what does one do, she, shoeless and worn
Frazzled and talking to self.
Does she open the door and walk herself in
No she puts that in mind's back shelf.

First checking the cars in the lot to make sure
It's his, not someones in like.
Damn it she thinks, damn him, some more
As she now knows hes in there with Mike.

Feet sore from gravel and stone chips in road
A 6 block walk she had done.
Opening the door, leaning in calling out
She is maddened, and he's having fun.

Well town once again, will be talking of her
This unshoed, hysterical She.
But I'm telling a tale that in time one will learn
That the morals not morally he....

So she walks all alone, up the hill towards that house
The one that she's batty from chase.
He's there, drove on home, he sees not a thing
And she now will stay up in her lace....

Every light on in house, she has taken her quilt
And is pillowed right here watching you.
There'll be no sleeping tonight, she is too filled with fright
Will try reaching her 1000th, by day new.


M
8*11*2k


© Copyright 2000 Maureen - All Rights Reserved
beowulf_26
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1 posted 2000-08-11 12:55 PM


After taking a couple weeks off I'm delighted to have begun today's visit with your work.  The poem was very well done and kept my interest throughout.  I look forward to reading more.


Unrequited love sucks.

MMoonchild
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2 posted 2000-08-11 01:33 AM


thank you...can you catch bats...was written out of hurt anger and spite..a great mixture huh...there's more to the story but I'm too worn out to do it...*s
thank you  fo rthe kind  words
M

serenity blaze
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3 posted 2000-08-11 02:07 AM


Oh Maureen you have moved me with this...you've mirrored me...softly...smiles?
Hugs to you...

T McCoy
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4 posted 2000-08-11 02:25 AM


what a story you have told here Maureen...
very powerful...although i was kinda hoping she'd flatten his tires!

excellent writing, again!  

Tony

MMoonchild
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5 posted 2000-08-11 02:59 AM


serenity ...gosh I hope not...it's no the best of any worlds....and every time I get a whisper of promise somewhere...a breeze  comes..even a very light one and  whisps it away....tomorrow I always  say...maybe something better will come my way...but tomorrow never comes....

~~soft hugs
M

ThUnDeRkYsS
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6 posted 2000-08-11 07:11 PM


Oh MM, how I wish I could just come and give you a big hug {{{MM}}}  This will have to do    I know how difficult things like this can be and it's a shame anyone has to deal with them.  Very well written and expressed.

Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer.



MMoonchild
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7 posted 2000-08-12 08:19 AM


Tony

not such a good idea(I could a sworn I responded to you on this)I flatten his  whoops.... I mean she flattens his and she may get flattened too
~~soft thoughts and thank you  
Maureen

MMoonchild
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8 posted 2000-08-12 01:22 PM


ThUnDeRkYsS

thank you kiss friend..I will take a hug any day  from you
~~soft smiles
Maureen

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