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As the Seasons Slowly Turn, I suppose

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Christopher
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As the Seasons Slowly Turn, I suppose
© 2000 Christopher Ward


Springtime’s been hitched to the stars
and so these wagons roll silently away
Thus ends this big adventure I suppose
Five thousand hours & a million smiles
ride fast away from what we used to be
into the setting dawn of can’t go back
Fade now the darkness into lonely hues
this Summer is screaming in desolation
Fiery plumes from foggy gray teardrops
casting shadows of moonlit smatterings
So, another dreary nighttime I suppose
Closing off my mind Fall stumbles near
Trapping cascades and brilliant echoes
of canned laughters and preserved joys
It chases in rainbow falls of peaceful
and it leaves me, breathlessly wistful
I must wish outside for hope I suppose
I unearth the ornaments of our passing
to place them highly in my re-memories
and peruse the pain over years gone by
A house grown barren over molding loss
scented with pine and laminated images
Winter now nothing save an endless eve
I can live without your love I suppose


© Copyright 2000 C.G. Ward - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 08-10-2000 08:11 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine

"I must wish outside for hope..."

and to answer the question, no, you can't...[live without {us}]!

Wonderful, Chris!
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2 posted 08-10-2000 08:26 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

As I slowly read this poem, I suppose I could say it's ok..but then I think of the time you took over each word...each phrase.. and the format. You care about your craft and it shows. So I suppose I will admit I love this..and it's very, very good!  
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3 posted 08-10-2000 08:27 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

A coming to terms here--and beautifully done, of course--read like a lengthy sigh...hugs to you m'lord...and admiration for this streamy dreamy piece.
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4 posted 08-10-2000 08:32 PM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

"Fade now the darkness into lonely hues"

"I unearth the ornaments of our passing"

Exquisite lines, though with images so rich, it was difficult to select anything "favorite" here, Chris. I enjoyed your many allusions to light and colour, and the elemental nature of your adjoining earth, sky and emotion.

The full justification made for nice presentation, too.  

~ Claire


Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

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5 posted 08-10-2000 10:12 PM       View Profile for Jenn E   Email Jenn E   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Jenn E

This was so beautifully put together, Your use of words were perfect here. Very descriptive and well thought out I am sure. This you should be proud of, along with all the rest! Enjoyed this very much!  
Jenn E
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6 posted 08-10-2000 10:20 PM       View Profile for Jamie   Email Jamie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Jamie's Home Page   View IP for Jamie

A house grown barren over molding loss
my favorite gem in a poem full of jewels




Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".


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7 posted 08-10-2000 10:46 PM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

I wanna post this one on my site. Can I? Can I?  PULEASE?

I love it! SUPERB work Chris!!!
Sudhir Iyer
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8 posted 08-11-2000 05:04 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

I have never seen a more interesting block of words.... never at all... inspires me a lot... to try this one... (he he   me and poetry... I must be joking again...)

Chris...

My regards,
sudhir
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9 posted 08-11-2000 12:56 PM       View Profile for Christopher   Email Christopher   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Christopher

Sunshin-y one - Are you quite sure about that? Remember, there's that psychological problem we discussed...

Sharon - Remember, you're supposed to be mean to me! Why? I don't know, but I'll not be able to get out the door now m'friend!

Se'n - A thank you m'lady. I bow to kiss thy hand.  

Claire - Did I ever mention that I like how you read my poems?  

Jenn E - Wow. I'm humbled (Ok, I'm not, but it sounds nice to say that) by your kind reply! You give much to this that was not there before by laying your eyes and mind to it. I thank you for that.

Jamie - Wow, a whole poem full of jewels! What say we go sell them and take a trip to Vegas??? Thank you for the understanding.  

Becca - LOL. Yes, of course you can. And I'll only charge you $0.10 a word. JUST KIDDING! Yes you may use it on your site! (just be sure to keep the formatting! If you have probs, let me know, I'll tell ya how I did it!  )

Sudhir - Needs not be a joke m'friend! I look forward to you doing this! (But pay attention... even the title is justified with the rest! ) Thank you sir!

Chris
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Chris,
The joke has become a reality, my friend and thanks for the tip...  

I am posting it in the open forum 9. Check it out and tell me if it is any good.

Title: I wish upon a meteorite to get you back!

regards,
sudhir.

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All I can say is "resistance if futile" you will be assimilated. Christopher you’ve been watching too many reruns of the Borg…lol

But to be sincere this was amazing, as soon as I opened it I was assimilated. I’m with Claire whatever she means.  
I don’t really see a coming to terms here, to me more like An unsaid next thought would be… “But, I would prefer not to.”
  
You are quite an innovator, can you do a perfect circle…lol.

Parker

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Okay...I don't suppose you'll tell me how you did this one  
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13 posted 08-12-2000 10:38 AM       View Profile for WhtDove   Email WhtDove   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit WhtDove's Home Page   View IP for WhtDove

Thanks Chris! I'll let ya know when I'm ready  
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I suppose that I have to say that I think you've done quite a good job on this one - I like your creatively square mind, my friend...
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15 posted 08-12-2000 01:55 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Christopher oh master of the form
Such a delight to read the render
and find the formatting delicious
Soon to be printed out on display




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Most excellent work.  You continue to grow as a poet, as life infuses experience into talented hands.

Corinne
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very nicely crafted, Chris, very nice.


Kathleen


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For a poet to find a format that matches his personality is a rare thing indeed!  

Truthfully, I really admire the thought and effort you put into your work. It shows that you are a craftsman of the trade..a quality I admire....and I understood this one!!!
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19 posted 08-13-2000 04:24 AM       View Profile for Elizabeth Santos   Email Elizabeth Santos   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Elizabeth Santos

A screaming summer and a stumbling fall
And re-remembering it all
And teardrops of a foggy gray
Make your poetry a realm away
Superb
Liz
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All I can add to your rave reviews is "wow"...very fitting style for you sir.  This one sure got the ooohs and aaaahs.  
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Sudhir - I saw it and thought you did a fantabulous job!

Haleyja - Hate to disappoint ya, but I'm not a Trekkie! LOL In reality, the truth of my thoughts lie somewhere between your VP and serenity's. There were thoughts of closure and final acceptance, but also a bite of: "I don't care anymore," or as you said "I wouldn't want to..." But I am also a firm believer in the idea that the reader creates their own interpretation, so yours is 100% valid! Thank you for the thoughts! As to the perfect circle... isn't that a new band...

Ruth - Umm... I just wrote it? LOL... THe justification was due to character count matching exactly on each line. I used the "Courier new" font, since it is a fixed width font. That's it! Now where's yours?

Becca - GREAT!

Nan - Why thankee ma'am! I 'preciate your 'preciation!  

Marge - Ever a smile you provide. Thank you lady, for another one!  

Corinne - Thank you lady. Interesting wording, but tre altogether! How can we fail but to grow? We have the choice to go ahead, or to stagnate. I'm too partial about personal hygeine to allow the latter to occur!  

Kathleen - Thank you for your reply!

Bal - Hmm... Thank you... I think!   Seriously... thank you. That means much to me that you appreciate the appreciation I have. It never fails to show, I believe, when someone really cares about what they are doing. It shows in their work, always! And...ermm... I'm glad you could "understand it"...? LOL

Liz - And you lady. Ever warming the soul with smiles and beautiful words from a kind and caring, gentle heart. You've not failed this time either!  

Gen - Now there's a face I'd not expected to see again! Where ya been lady? Hmmm? Thank you muchly for making an appearance on this!


Chris
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22 posted 08-14-2000 05:24 PM       View Profile for Nicole   Email Nicole   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Nicole

"Fiery plumes from foggy gray teardrops
casting shadows of moonlit smatterings"

wow

You are a poet.  It doesn't get much better than this, Chris.

(BOL)
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23 posted 08-14-2000 08:34 PM       View Profile for Severn   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Severn

I read this a couple of days ago - due to time constraints I didn't deign to reply - lol...

but here I is...

well.

This poem C is...hmmmm...finding words.
Complete. Tight. It has such an unusual quality...can't quite put my finger on it. of course there are a few little things I would change...lol...of course.

But, overall, it is a stunner. Most modern C, most modern...hehe...there's my seal of approval instantly.

It just all fits together so well...words can do that can't they?

K



"He looked across the
silky surface of the Severn,
and remembered that it
was a famously difficult
river with fierce tides..."


From J
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24 posted 08-14-2000 11:52 PM       View Profile for Alwye   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Alwye

"Trapping cascades and brilliant echoes
of canned laughters and preserved joys" That would be my favorite in a nearly perfect piece of work my friend.  Extremely well done, I loved it!  


*Krista Knutson*

"You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back."
-Barbara DeAngelis
 
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