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An August Night
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An August Night |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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An August Night The moon was cut in half with perfect knife that left the light dimmed and the water filled with stars. Across the laughter of a splash we swept the surface, a slither of soft beguile was I dressed in just part of the moon and covered with pearls. His eyes were a silk blanket that moved around me as he folded with me into an underwater love dance of slow drenched grace. A honeyed longing for brother otter the moon sang into my thoughts and transposed the back yard’s fenced in parlay, into an ocean of dark crystal depth, a magic mystic changing, and it felt like home, with motion more natural then the clumsy clunking footfall that is dirt and gravel, the blacktop of being human. We were transformed that August night when the moon was cut in half with perfect knife that left the light dimmed and the water filled with stars into the liquid grace of we. |
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T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
"...the liquid grace of we." great writing Martie! Tony  |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Having watched a pair of otters just the other day - your beautifuk words - transported me from the blacktop just that muct better - Most Beautiful- truly~S~ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ You 'otter' have a book published - NOW ! 'His eyes were a silk blanket that moved around me as he folded with me into an underwater love dance of slow drenched grace.' What beautiful sights you share. I'm there ! Love you~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Martie - Oh, the beautiful wonders you work with that pen!!! This is magnificent, first word to last. Bonnie |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
You never cease to amaze my friend. Absolutely divine poetry. |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Martie, I've never looked at you as a slither but....liquid grace?....ALWAYS! Another beauty, Martie  |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
T--Thanks for the very nice comment! Wilfred--Glad to help with transportation...thanks for saying I helped get you from the black top. Marge--I'm always happy to share with you, your replies always make me smile. Bonnie--Thanks for such a sweet reply. Mike--Your wonderful words make me smile. Deer--I slither quite well, really...thanks for always saying something special. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Such a sensual capture of moments. Beautiful, as always, my friend. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Wonderful |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire and Jamie...thank you so much for reading and for your wonderful comments. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Beautiful as beauty in itself.... regards, sudhir P.S. pssst check out announcement... congrats for the 4000 [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (edited 08-10-2000).] |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
Very nice! I really liked this: We were transformed that August night when the moon was cut in half with perfect knife that left the light dimmed and the water filled with stars |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
An August Night The moon was cut in half with perfect knife that left the light dimmed and the water filled with stars. Across the laughter of a splash we swept the surface, a slither of soft beguile was I dressed in just part of the moon and covered with pearls. His eyes were a silk blanket that moved around me as he folded with me into an underwater love dance of slow drenched grace. A honeyed longing for brother otter the moon sang into my thoughts and transposed the back yard’s fenced in parlay, into an ocean of dark crystal depth, a magic mystic changing, and it felt like home, with motion more natural then the clumsy clunking footfall that is dirt and gravel, the blacktop of being human. We were transformed that August night when the moon was cut in half with perfect knife that left the light dimmed and the water filled with stars into the liquid grace of we. Now I know what you do on your weekends other than fish. Playing around like that like a couple o otters.....well gggggoooooooddd for you. Stay forever young in your heart.  |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Amazing......so beautiful...excellent writing, "To the centre of the city where all roads meet, waiting for you,To the depths of the ocean where all hopes sank, searching for you," Joy divison |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Really nice. Great imagination. Deb Blooming Rose |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sudhir--thank you for the beautiful comment and for seeing that 4,000...wow...I am amazed at myself. Lakewalker--Thank you so much for you nice response. Mark--with a husband ten years younger then me, I stay young...age is not a number anyway, right?....it's an attitude. Hi brian--always nice to see you...thanks. Deb--Thanks for the imagination comment...I just added a little to reality. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Awesome, I wish I stopped to smell the roses the way you do, Martie. Killer last line, too. Corinne |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
WOW! I hate to use just one word but this was sooooo good. You have a great imagination and your words all fit so well together. Jenn E |
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