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Just Below (1st post) |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Just below the surface there is a sadness What some might call a madness He calls a strength, a refuge of his own Lurking under layers of flesh Breaking through each one by one He lies just below and out of sight Out of sight and out of mind Through words and deeds And stuck in time Apart, he is whole again Silence is the noise wrapped in shades of red Turned another page, yet another day But his eyes saw what could have been instead What could have been instead Just below the surface he is all that he sees And all that he will ever be There come others to pick the bones One, two, three Yet still deeper and deeper it runs Scared he doesn’t have enough in him To fill all the vacant little holes Replacing with useless vigor The tarnished surface with lower lows The same sound reverberates in his ears Of the last thing that she said That she came to know he was still alive Before his eyes had turned to red But his eyes were already dead [This message has been edited by PoeticKnight (edited 08-09-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Excellent, I enjoyed this alot...my how you suit my mood....welcome to Passions...hope to be reading more from you in the future! |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
Welcome to Passions! Excellant first post...hope to definatly read more of your work. It has this slight mystery about it that makes it all the more interesting. Welcome! Salooma |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thank you all so much....i definitely feel welcomed. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Sheltering ones self always comes with a price. There are lessons to be learned in living life and accepting the pain and using it to grow. You pen very well and I am looking forward to more of your works. Welcome to Passions....stick around and go play in the garden of poets a little.  |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Thanks for sharing this wonderful poem. Hope to see more follow. Welcome to Passions. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Welcome to Passions! Excellent read you have here. Enjoyed it very much and looking forward to more. Juls |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I enjoyed reading this fine poem...James |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
Let me just say welcome to Passions. I myself am a new memebr who this very day posted my first poem. Your poem was written well and I hope to read some more |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family! I enjoyed your poem and look forward to reading more from you! I hope you enjoy your stay here and have a good time reading and replying to the poetry that our 'family of friends' post. Sharing is our name (well mine is Sharon, but you know what I mean!). Please check your email for a special welcome!  |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Welcome...I feel so sad after reading.. ~~soft hugs Maureen |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Welcome Knight to this poets world...wonderful first write...even tho I missed this the first time thru I am glad I have the chance to put it back on top |
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cathybohannan Member
since 2000-07-31
Posts 140Paintsville,KY |
Welcome to Passion,keep up the good work. |
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