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By Rippled Pond |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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By Rippled POnd In the glades ‘mongst willow trees By misty pond of memories I sit and ponder mysteries Of a love that used to be Sound of thrush and wren and swallow In the rushes of the hollow In his footsteps I would follow To the place where he would be On the banks of rippled pond Of mind and soul the two would bond So mesmerized was I and fond Of everything he said to me So deep his thoughts, so deep phantasms Deep as waters murky plasm In the deepness of mind’s chasm Wondrous questions came to be Our minds would dance in perfect rhythm Just as shimmering rainbow prism Danced across the culture schism In this world of him and me The quiet hush among the rushes Draws the cheeks to crimson flushes Haunting me as water gushes O’er the dam and falling free It was here that he was found In waters deep by grassy ground By rippled pond the world is bound In mind and soul to him and me I stare into the water’s glaze And there I see his gentle face A rippled mind too out of place Except when he was here with me My heart will never care to wander Here I sit alone and ponder Evermore to sadly wonder As the swallows sing to me Elizabeth Santos |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
WOW, Liz, this is amazing... WONDERFUL WORK.... geez, I gotta get my thesaurus back...  regards, sudhir. P.S. if I remember well, you had seen this rhyme scheme in one of the poems around and commented that you should try this too... and if I remember too well, it was one of Marge's poem... anyway this rhyme scheme a-a-a-b is great... but then coming from your quill, what isnt'? if I am wrong, I can remember who to blame it... my memory  |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
this is fantastic oman i love it could read it lots times over! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth, my friend~ Such lovely ripples memories make Undulating across the lake Until on other shores they quake Finding their way to another's heart. You've so much talent to share, dearest poet. This is lovely. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh Elizabeth....your writing never ceases to amaze me....beautiful  |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Simply yet profoundly beautiful.....The flow of this was magnificent! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
You seem to just write more beautifully with every stroke from your pen! This is just stunning Liz! Our minds would dance in perfect rhythm Just as shimmering rainbow prism Danced across the culture schism In this world of him and me Applause!!! ~HUGS~ my dear lady! <*\\\>< The will of God will never lead you, where the grace of God cannot keep you. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
enchanting |
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Lakewalker Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289On the streets w/ people |
My heart will never care to wander Here I sit alone and ponder Evermore to sadly wonder As the swallows sing to me I love the ending of your poem, well, I love the whole thing of course, but the ending is wonderful as well |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Elizabeth, Beautiful and amazing rosepetals |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Beautiful, Liz...you must know English as a second language, because your First is Poetry! Lovely, my friend. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Elizabeth-Truely a remarkable and lovely piece from your heart. I liked reading this over again and feeling your thoughts. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Liz-this has a natural beauty of its own which is heightened by your imagery and the use of this rhyme scheme.....loved it much. [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 08-08-2000).] |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Liz You are such a gifted poet - I always expect the best from you when I open your posts - I am never disappointed. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Elizabeth... Everything I could possible say about this poem has already been said so I will just add that it gave me pleasure to read it!!! Thank you for sharing your beautiful talent..... I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sudhir, you have a great memory, Yes, I love this rhyme scheme and I'm glad you likethe poem. Thank you Walt, Thank you for your comments. They mean a lot Marge, Thank you! I have enjoyed rereading your website Hoot, Thanks so much. It's so good to see you again Butterfly, Thank you for the kind remarks. I really enjoyed Marks poem about you and with that came to know you a little better Whtdove, You quoted my favorite part of this poem Thank you Paula, Thank you so much for your nice comment Lakewalker. Your comments are so kind and much appreciated Rosepetals, Not as beautiful as rosepetals Thanks Claire, Your comment was so kind and now you've brought on some tears. What a nice thing to say Thank you Gemoni. Thank you so much for the compliment Mark, Thank you, Mark, so nice a comment Lngjohn, Glad to see you again. Thanks, my friend for the comment. Liz |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sunny, You just made my day a little sunnier. Thank you so much for reading and commenting on my poems Liz |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Elizabeth this work is so deep and passionate as so many of yours are. Your reflections are so pure and poignant. It's as if one is really there inside the scene as a participant or observer and when you present imperfect vulnerable humanity in retrospect you do so with such style. God bless you for your talent and willingness to share. Take care ethome |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--this is lovely! I was enthralled by the sound of this one... So deep his thoughts, so deep phantasms Deep as waters murky plasm In the deepness of mind’s chasm Wondrous questions came to be wonderful to read out loud...vivid imagery....I loved it! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
ethome, your response is so gerous and I appreciate it so much. I'm so glad you liked this poem Liz Martie, Thanks, dear, I believe you did like this. It means so much Liz |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, You are all that I knew you were And your poetry reads like myrrh. Love Sy |
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