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Would You? |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England 
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Would you wander through this world and dance with me across this naked land? Would you still reach out to me, knowing how I long to take your hand? Would you like to run through misty forests, just before the break of dawn? Would you chase the shadows one by one, until the dark is finally gone? Would you lay me down on fields of daisies in a meadow kissed by dew? Would you gently touch my soul with words of love that come from only you? Would you start a fire in my soul I can't control, then walk away? or.. Would you take me deep within your arms of love, and kiss my breath away? Would you wish upon a star while lying with me, naked in the night? Would you dance with me while watching spirits dance within the Northern Lights? Would you chase the cold within my heart, by songs of love on wings of fire? Would you be the one to fill the need that grows within my heart's desire? Of all the questions I have asked the one that has the hardest words to say.. Is one that has been known to break the spell, and drive your lover away.. Just little words, once spoken, soon determine how one's life will surely be.. I'm asking of your heart, for my heart's sake: Just tell me, please... Would you love me? |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
deep from the heart... these words flow... Sunny1, got some excellent lines in there... regards, sudhir |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Sudhir.... Thank you, kind sir, and I am learning how to listen to my heart from master poets such as yourself! I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
oh dear lady i give you *applause*! these questions so full of life and love and hope and beauty! i hope he says he loves you because you deserve it! ~Dawn whatcha doing in this darkness baby when you know love will set you free? will you stay in the sea forever Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Dawn.... Thank you, my friend, and the only worthy goal in life, to me, is love! I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sunny1~ Thirteen questions - lend themselves to a stacked deck of an answer ... Beguiling little piece, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Good morning Sunny, Oh my, would I! How your words are so very touching, and come directly from that romantic heart that you possess. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Marge.... You are so observant!!! 13 just happens to be my lucky number, so maybe this will be my lucky day!!! Thank you for stopping by, and I always love to hear from you!! I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Bill.... Ahhhh....thank you, kind sir, and I am truly glad that you came by for a read of this!! Your words always warm my day! I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
Sunny, so many questions! Phrased so beautifully too, how could he resist, except to give the answer you wish to hear. "A clay pot sitting in the sun will always be a clay pot. It has to go through the white heat of the furnace to become porcelain." --Mildred W. St |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Tess... Thank you so much! But in the case of love, one never knows what the answers will bring!! I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
If you don't ask the question you won't get the answer, Great work! God grant me the serenity to accept the people I cannot change, the courage to change the one I can, and the wisdom to know it's me. ~Unknown |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
EagleOne..... I totally agree!!!!! Thank you for flying by!! I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh, another one that speaks to me, Sunny. I did a similar, (less impressive) poem, asking the same question. It is the one question that can scare us to death, and yet the one we need the answer to the most. I love your words. And your vision. Catalinamoon [This message has been edited by catalinamoon (edited 08-08-2000).] |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
catalinamoon... Somehow, this question has such an elusive answer in reality. We just keep asking though. Thank you for coming by!! I have but one goal in life......It is: Not to have just one goal in Life!! ~ ~ ~ Sunny ~ ~ ~ |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Sunny, I loved the line, "kiss my breath away" This is a very beautiful poem and I I loved the imagery. Michael |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Auguste... I believe everyone of us longs to have our breath kissed away!!!! That would be the perfect way to go!! Thank you, enjoyed your reply.. I have but one goal in life......It is: Not to have just one goal in Life!! ~ ~ ~ Sunny ~ ~ ~ |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
If my reply you desire to see the url below is the key. /pip/Forum33/HTML/000677.html Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
BTW--Outstanding writing here. This beautiful poem stirred my heart, making me need to be the one who would. Wonderful and moving, Sunny1 [This message has been edited by Prometheus (edited 08-09-2000).] |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Jamie... BTW, did I tell you how much your beautiful poetic reply stirred my heart? I am so very glad that it had that effect, as that is what it was supposed to do for you! (I thought a firefighter was supposed to put Out the fire!!!) I have only one goal in life.. It Is: To have more than one goal in Life!! ~ ~ by Sunny ~ ~ |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed it a lot  |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Ask and you shall receive....just not always what you were looking to get.lol You have asked many questions in such a lovely way that my guess is that you shall receive the answer you seek. well written. |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
I admit that I read the reply beofre I read the questions lol. But nonetheless nothing has been taken away by me doing so. I wish both you and prometheus the best. It's a beautiful poem, and with respect to prometheus, a beautiful reply |
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Salooma Senior Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 781 |
wow sunny...absoultly stunning! Salooma |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Oh Sunny, there is such longing in these words.... and the last question really hit more so than the others....Brought tears to my eye, yes a good question ... Would You?... love me? Woderful! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
S1, didn't I tell you in one of my very first posts that you would have fun here?! And I can see you're not only having a good time... but you're enjoying the heck out of it as well! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
vandana... Thank you so much.....glad you stopped by! Mark... I hope so.... Thank you for your kind reply!! JnR4eva |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
vandana... Thank you so much.....glad you stopped by! Mark... I hope so.... Thank you for your kind reply!! JnR4eva... I am so happy you liked this... I love Jamie's poem, and the 2 are perfect together... Thank you for coming by!!! Salooma... Thank you for reading and liking! Dark Angel... Thank you for your input!! I really think this is one question that everyone asks, at some point. Sunshine... Yes, you did tell me that, and I had a sneaky suspicion at the time that you were right!! Now I know you are!!!! Yes, I do love this place, and the family is wonderful!!!! Thank you, it means a lot! I have only one goal in life.. It Is: To have more than one goal in Life!! ~ ~ by Sunny ~ ~ |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is a wonderful poem. And one of the hardest things to ask is your last line. We all want to be loved but are afraid of the rejection if we ask and are turned down. I applaud you for this.  |
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Artistic Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 107Colorado/Rochester, NY |
Beautiful poem... flows beautifully and very aptly describes what one might feel. Nicely done! ~Artistic~ |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Poet deVine... I thank you so much for your wonderful reply. Yes, it is hard question because we're all afraid ot the answer! Thank you again! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Artistic..... Hi, and thank you for coming by to read this. I always like to get the input!! (Glad you liked it!) I have only one goal in life.. It Is: To have more than one goal in Life!! ~ ~ by Sunny ~ ~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sunny if you can find someone that will do all those wonderful things you describe in the leading verses I can't see how they could'nt end up loving you. Such beautiful flowing romantic lines of intense sensuality and passion. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
ethome.... What you said in your reply has more truth to it than you could possibly know. Thank you so much, and I am glad you liked this.... I have only one goal in life.. It Is: To have more than one goal in Life!! ~ ~ by Sunny ~ ~ |
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BSC
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Just beautiful!!!! Bonnie |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Bonnie.. I'm so glad you stopped by for a read......and I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thank you!! I have only one goal in life.. It Is: To have more than one goal in Life!! ~ ~ by Sunny ~ ~ |
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