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Soul Eaten |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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This is a little different from my usual, a little more 'raw' you could say...but I felt a need to write it, and so here it is. I truly belive (and I have seen my share of them) that love is the only way to conquer the demons within us. Hungry, empty, soul eaten In swells of starless shadow Your wounded spirit drifts... I see myself In the apparitions of your eyes We have both bled ...and fallen... Suffering alone in the starkness Of the hollowed skies. Vulcan's wrath has tortured Leaving scars within His flame has now iced And only withered dreams are seen Within the windswept ashes. Fleeting breaths of light Slowly dwindle away From the phantom once known as you. Let me hold you now... Feel the space between us blur And mingle with lucid morning Allow the midnight shackled to your limbs To gently fade away... And know now That the only way through Is simply to love Like never before. *Krista Knutson* "You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back." -Barbara DeAngelis |
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SEA 
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since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Alwye~ WOW! This is excellent! Great poem.  -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Really good writing Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I see myself In the apparitions of your eyes We have both bled ...and fallen... Suffering alone in the starkness Of the hollowed skies. Feel the space between us blur And mingle with lucid morning Allow the midnight shackled to your limbs To gently fade away... And know now That the only way through Is simply to love Like never before. Wow this is exquisite in every way....you have reached far into the depths of wonderment with this one. Great read |
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Dusk Treader
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since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Great poem, Krista! I loved how this one played out and the message it holds, indeed I hold it true that love is the way to bind our demons. Oh, and that end verse was spectacular, sweetheart! Abrahm Simons "Keep on dreamin' boy 'cause when you stop dreaming it's time to die" - Blind Melon |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"In swells of starless shadow" "Suffering alone in the starkness Of the hollowed skies." Krista, as a poet, you are shining, dear. Love the alliterative images all through this fascinating piece! ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Silkdragon Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 65 |
krista, i very much agree. love can conquer all, cliched as that sounds. love the line: ....and fallen.... suffering alone in the starkness of the hollowed skies." mmm, for some reason that reaches me. i think everyone can identify with loneliness and heartache. lovely read, my friend. i like the 'rawness' as you call it. like to see more of it erin |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
I thank you all for your kind words. *Krista Knutson* "You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back." -Barbara DeAngelis |
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Dawn Eclipse Senior Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 637The Horsehead Nebula |
Hey Krissa, nice poem, and nice view. It's one way to look at all the pain and suffering we go through... and how to overcome it. "The universe is full of magical things patiently waiting for our wits to grow sharper." Eden Phillpotts *Cassandra Roseen* |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Incredible Krista ... this is simply wonderful! Such raw emotion and imagery ... excellent writing! Best wishes, /Kit |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
simply beautiful poem... such Perfect work! This one also reflects a lot on my life If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise? Avanti Rao |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I find it hard to say how much I like this. Your words have always been magnificent. This is darkly beautiful. A departure for you to be sure, but you can do anything!  |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
I am really at aloss for words with this, which is a compliment beacuse I am never al a loss for words........lol But really, this was so well written. I am sorry but all I can say is WOW!!!! Jenn E |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW Krista, this is excellent writing!!! You are an amazing Poet, Dear |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Krista...your talent shines through clearly in this piece. Well done |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Krista--beautifully done dark images...and the end so light with love...perfect! |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Thank you all so much! *Krista Knutson* "You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back." -Barbara DeAngelis |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Excellent work indeed.... regards, sudhir |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
I'm really glad I caught this one Krista! Well, it may not be your "normal" style, but it is one that nonetheless fits you perfectly! I really enjoyed the imagery and the hard hitting emotions! A bravo lady! Chris |
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