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Where Creation Finally Breathes
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Where Creation Finally Breathes |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Where Creation Finally Breathes The flow is so illusive. To scrunch my eyes and push it from my pores is to bruise my skin searching. I’ve tried humming a mantra to the muse only to find silly past fragments that kiss the sound into a sigh. Don’t expect to hear it knocking with thought in delicious anticipation, the flow is so gentle it waits for open doors. You must come around behind it without appearing to be looking, and then walk with it, no walls no time no dimension only this sweet movement that comes from a place that weeps with vision. It is the space where dear freedom takes its first step and creation finally breathes. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
smiling here Martie... I read in awe the continuing flow of your poetry... each poem a gem unto itself... and have such a hard time visualizing you scrunching your eyes... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, You grab me every time I read your poetry. A gentle kiss would do me fine. *L* |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Much beauty here, my friend. ~ Claire |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mike--I can scrunch my eyes really well, thank you  Thanks for your lovely comment. Sy--You made me smile with your comment, thank you. Claire--You are so sweet, thank you! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ My friend, you just get better and better. ( 'scrunchy eyes' and all ! )I like the way this one sneaks up on me ! Delightful ... just delightful !) Love you~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
The expression, the flow and the choice of words... make a lasting impression on this reader... ...and creation finally breathes... what a thought ... Many regards to you Martie, sudhir |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
You captured the complete spirit of it all with your words... so lovely Peppermint Life is a Wheel |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is lovely - and "creation" certainly is a subjective term... It can have a unique interpretation to each and every reader... Nicely done, my friend...  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Marge--thanks sweet sis Sudhir--What a wonderful compliment, thank you! Peppermint--Well thank you...to capture a spirit is not easy. Nan--you're right...it is...thanks for your comment and your sweet words. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You have desribed perfectly the subtle way some things come to be...lovely never say never |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I’ve tried humming a mantra to the muse only to find silly past fragments that kiss the sound into a sigh. Don’t expect to hear it knocking with thought in delicious anticipation, the flow is so gentle it waits for open doors. ================== me muse ignores me mantra  very cool poem here martie-gator sometimes we have to work a little harder for it all... dont I know... whats that old saying mothers use to nag us with... "If you keep making those faces its gonna freeze that way... I got permanent "scrunchie face " LOLoh well... poetry happends jm ps thank you for the wonderful E. and pic.. I will write back soon...promise ... love that sunflower |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Martie-your little gems have formed a treasure chest in my soul.....I admire your talent and your vision in all that you write and now I have one of your secrets...LOL...scrunchy faced I am and learning to act non chalantly as I approach from behind.LOLLOL....Wonderful read. Thank you once again. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Martie, You are the best, I love this appraoch to creation, in fact your perspective on everything is so unique and creatively expressed Liz |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Hmm Martie...you have to sneek up on yours from behind? Mine jumps me whenever it chooses and generally when i am unprepared....lol. I love this piece and the way you created it. When you are old and grey and full of sleep, And nodding by the fire, take down this book, And slowly read, and dream of the soft look Your eyes had once, and of their shodows deep; How many loved your moments of glad grace, And loved your beauty with love false or true, But one man loved the pilgrim soul in you, And loved the sorrows of your changing face... William Butler Yeats |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
ohhh yeah, Martie - If I was a real pirate, you'd ne'er see the bonny shores of Scotland again, lassie. This is a great poem - you do this free verse thingie sooo well! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Paula--thank you for such a nice reply. JM---Yes, whatever the way, poetry happens! Mark--Thanks for making me smile with your scruncy face...JM's mom will get you with the scrunchies forever. Thanks for being so sweet. Liz--I'm always so pleased when you reply...thank you sweet lady. Marilyn--Hi...nice to see you...I guess the trick is to be prepared all the time. Long John--You mean you'rw not a real pirate...sigh...thanks for the nice reply, I'll unpack my bag. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 08-08-2000).] |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Hi Martie,...that was sooo so neat. Wow in it's reading and the message that it holds. That was needed here. Very cool writing you've done. Take care M. *Peace. |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
simply charming poem great imaginery,creation breathes... never thought of it like that very well written If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise? Avanti Rao |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
This was so lovely. The title was perfect. I look forward to reading more. Jenn E |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
The title drew me and and the poem did not dissapoint |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
SpitFire--Thanks for the cool...and peace to you as well. AVANTI--It's great to know that I said this in a new way...thanks for letting me know. Jenn e--Thanks you so much for the read and reply. Ruth--Hi, glad the title drew you in...haven't seen you for awhile. Hugs! |
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