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SpitFire
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0 posted 2000-08-07 08:09 PM


Bathe Me In The Sky

Bathe me where the air is free
and tastes of passion fruit,
where sprinkles fall and blanket thee and
sparkle from within.
Bathe me where the twinkles dance
and radiate the nights,
where tickles play and smiles chance and
giggle with the moon.
Bathe me where the covers lay
and gently warm inside,
where eyes are wide and happy stays and
weightlessness is free.
Bathe me, bathe me, won't you please
in skies of moonlit beams.
Bathe me, bathe me, won't you please
where realities are dreams.



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Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
1 posted 2000-08-07 08:13 PM


Spitfire...This is the first time that I have come by your place for a read. I'm glad that I did. The two sentences below are very striking to me. I'll be by again to read another.

Bathe me, bathe me, won't you please
in skies of moonlit beams.

Bathe me, bathe me, won't you please
where realities are dreams.


Parker
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2 posted 2000-08-07 08:28 PM


Spitfire, ohhh I really liked this.. I'll bring the sponge, and you bring the suds and meet me by the river in the moonlight.....

Parker

Jeffrey Carter
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3 posted 2000-08-07 08:35 PM


MMMMMMMMMMMMM

Spitfire, I know exactly what you mean

The best and most beaytiful things in the world cannot be seen or touched...but are felt in the heart (Helen Keller)


serenity blaze
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4 posted 2000-08-07 08:59 PM


"Bathe me where the twinkles dance..."

Y'know, that just sounds very appealing...
This is lovely and playful Spitfire...you just keep bringin' 'em on...

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
5 posted 2000-08-07 09:21 PM


Bathe Me In The Sky
Bathe me where the air is free
and tastes of passion fruit,
where sprinkles fall and blanket thee and
sparkle from within.
Bathe me where the twinkles dance
and radiate the nights,
where tickles play and smiles chance and
giggle with the moon.
Bathe me where the covers lay
and gently warm inside,
where eyes are wide and happy stays and
weightlessness is free.
Bathe me, bathe me, won't you please
in skies of moonlit beams.
Bathe me, bathe me, won't you please
where realities are dreams.

Oh WOW....I know just the place....in a hidden pool of shimmering gold moonlight at the base of a green velveted waterfall....

Beautiful read....I loved it tremendously.

Marge Tindal
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6 posted 2000-08-07 11:46 PM


SpitFire~
Oh, now talk about lovely ... !!  
This is it ! !
~*Marge*~



~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Martie
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7 posted 2000-08-07 11:47 PM


What a lovely place it is, this place that is made of words...beautiful imagery and sensory feel.  Loved it!
AVANTI
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INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE
8 posted 2000-08-07 11:54 PM


loved this one...
very well wrtiien...
great use of words...

If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise?
Avanti Rao



Alwye
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In the space between moments
9 posted 2000-08-08 01:00 AM


Spitfire, this is pure beauty...I am enchanted by your words.  Exquisite scene woven here, I enjoyed it greatly.  

*Krista Knutson*

"You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back."
-Barbara DeAngelis

poutprincess
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10 posted 2000-08-08 01:24 AM


oh this is gorgeous!
ah, what a smile this has brought to my face!

grinning,
~Dawn

whatcha doing in this darkness baby
when you know love will set you free?
will you stay in the sea forever
Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live

Meadowmuse
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11 posted 2000-08-08 01:32 AM


This is a treasure, to be sure. I want to be bathed like this!

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


insect
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since 2000-04-22
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12 posted 2000-08-08 01:32 AM


This is an extraordinary piece!
Love your poetry!!
Ssssee ya at the top!

Janet Marie
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13 posted 2000-08-08 10:48 AM


I ADORE this sweet, happy, softly sensual poem
such creative imagery...
this is so PERFECT spit-gator  
one of my favs now by you...
going in my file under S for SMILE  
so nice to see ya posting in open...
ya gotta come out of the dark sometime  
later-take a moonbath-gator
jm

Paula Finn
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missouri
14 posted 2000-08-08 11:10 AM


what a lovely image you have created...

never say never

ethome
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New Brunswick Canada
15 posted 2000-08-08 11:15 AM


Super!  Spitfire....bathe me with more of your beautiful poetic lines and cleanse my soul and mind....very well done!
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