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Alicat
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0 posted 2000-08-07 07:27 PM


For several days they traveled
Each wrapped in a cloak
Of thoughtful silence
Sometimes they'd share words
Or simply sit silently
Watching the vistas unroll
And, at times
They'd catch an eye and smile
But nothing more shall be
For you are she
And I am he
Passing strangers on a train


Alicat


As I sit here dimly thinking
Watching modem lights a-blinking
Churning out poetic hash.
Lord, in all Your piety,
Help me keep my sanity:
Please don't let the modem crash! --Alicat



© Copyright 2000 Alastair Adamson - All Rights Reserved
Jenn E
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1 posted 2000-08-07 07:52 PM


This poem makes me think of a conversation I just had with a friend. Your point is well taken here. It makes me wonder how many times true love has been passed, one will never know, as they will remain strangers.
A wonderful thought you had here.
Jenn E

Bill Charles
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2 posted 2000-08-07 08:25 PM


Alicat,
This is my first time by your place, and I'm glad that I stopped. So vivid a portrayal, in a few lines. Well Done!!!

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3 posted 2000-08-07 08:39 PM


Only God knows how often this happens and if IT could've been

Great portrayal of two ships kinda thing

The best and most beaytiful things in the world cannot be seen or touched...but are felt in the heart (Helen Keller)


Corinne
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state of confusion
4 posted 2000-08-07 10:29 PM


Nicely done!

Corinne

Poet deVine
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5 posted 2000-08-07 10:41 PM


Stop the train I want to get off!!! Excellent verse sir!    
Jamie
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6 posted 2000-08-07 10:45 PM


Very good work here



Jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".



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7 posted 2000-08-07 11:30 PM


'Cat, I could think, and have thought, many hours about the same thought that this poem describes. A train, a diner, a street corner...anywhere at all. I like your style, catman...
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