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Torn
New Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 9
Williamson

0 posted 2000-08-07 03:30 PM


My second post, hope you like it!

The Outlaw of Torn

And I've waited my whole lifetime
For you
I've rode the dirt, I've rode the tide
For you
I search the outside,I search inside
For you

To take back what you left me
I know I'll always burn to be
The one who seeks so I may find
And I've waited my whole lifetime

So I still wait my whole lifetime
For you
The more I search the more I need
For you
The more I bless the more I bleed
For you

You make me smash the clock and feel
I'd rather die behind the wheel
Time was never on my side
So on I wait my whole lifetime

Outlaw of Torn
And I'm Torn
It tears me and I bleed

Hear me
And if I close my mind in fear
Please pry it open
See me
And if my face becomes sincere, beware
Hold me
And when I start to come undone
Stich me togather
Save me
And when you see me strut
remind me of what left this outlaw torn.

© Copyright 2000 Jeffrey Barker - All Rights Reserved
Sunnyone
Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
1 posted 2000-08-07 03:39 PM


Hi Torn....
           Boy, I loved the line:

     "..if I close my mind in fear,
            please pry it open.."

           That is great writing!
               I'll be looking
                  for more!!


I have but one goal in
life.........
To make you smile!
~~ Sunny ~~


Lakewalker
Member Elite
since 2000-08-05
Posts 3289
On the streets w/ people
2 posted 2000-08-07 07:04 PM


I really enjoyed reading this poem, it gave me a real sense of inner refection.  Keep up the awesome poetry!
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