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Stormy Sea |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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Embarked upon a placid sail Light zephyrs the jib fills Smoothly cutting the water Sky blue, breeze warm, feeling thrills The wind rises, we tack across it Its whistle sings, sail edges flap We lean, take splash o'er the gunnels And know it's no time for a nap Holding the tiller, watching the sea Racing the storm home, stroking the beam The horizon darkens to white caps glee Lights on the shore now, slicing the cream Waves rising higher, we feel the hull slap Spray flying , we're bouncing, splash colding A big one, spear through it, drop with a bang Wind dropped, sky clearing, bold holding Secure in the slip, sails lowered, secured Warm cabin is lighted, brandies are poured We barely taste them to the bunk we're lured Bound tightly together as if with strong cord In calm harbor suppressed passions raging Reenacting the storm its slow building And blow, we were mostly there in staging We cut our own waves, sent liquids flying Sunlight crept into our porthole a beam A spotlight upon us, the king and the queen Naked in majesty, cuddled like a dream Is anything ever just what it seems |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Ahh...I love a good storm, but don't like being on the ocean during one!! This is a great poem, and I enjoyed it very much!!! I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
That's quite a handle you have....welcome to Passions. That's quite a poem you wrote...welcome to our appreciation for such artistic expression. That's a real play on words from all angles and anything really never is what it seems. excellent metaphours in graceful poetic lines. .....welcome! welcome!........ |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Sunny: It wasn't that BIG a storm ~G~ I was more interested in communicating the metaphor - Thank you for your thoughts - Once I was off Cape Hatteras in January on a troop ship - I found that 100 times more frightening Ethome The name offers some obscurity - I'll reveal more as I come to feel secure - So far Everyone has been wonderful. If It weren't for the Tunnel post yesterday - I might have posted this in Adult - Thank you for your kind words. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Wilfred Yeats, A very descriptive poem of sailing on the sea. I could picture each detail, as I read it. I'm glad that I stopped by. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Bill Memories of Sailing on Lakes Michigan and St. Clair. I miss them - -Thank you |
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Diana Kessler Junior Member
since 2000-08-12
Posts 24U.S.A. |
Excellent verse. Very visual. Thank you for sharing. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
If you had deliberately set out to GRAB my attention you couldnt have chosen a more perfect way of doing it...the water...sailing...making sweet love...three of my favorites all wrapped up in one...THANK YOU THANK YOU...now on to the one you promised me. |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Quite a captain that Wilfred Yeats he knows the ropes, when he heads for the sea. we lean take splash of the gunnels... sunlight crept in our porthole a beam... *sigh* very romantic this beautiful scene more, more, please BloomingRose |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Diane - Visual - is how I write (most of the time) I hope I please - Thank You Paula - It is not my nature to "grab" (Hug, hold, Caress maybe) But I'm glad you enjoyed. - I'll get to work forthwith ;-Þ  BR - So shot me - I'm just a romantic by nature, I'll try to write like this for you  Thank you |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
LOL my poetic sailor...hold hug and caress work just fine |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
How did I miss this one...great imagery and a very sensory ride, I almost got sea sick (but I don't)...lovely sensual ending! |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
BR - Martie - thank you - I think I should write more ~S~ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I enjoyed your use of light rhyme and rhythm to create this fine, sensory~full poem. The recreation of the storm in lovemaking is very well done. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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