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After a Sleepless Night
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After a Sleepless Night |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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~After A Sleepless Night~ *!* The moon began its fall As if bowing hearing footsteps Of a distant rising dawn As if loosening itself From the dimming necklace Of the melting night *!* Light crimsoned twilight Spread its young new-born wings Over the summer earth As little winged friends Chirped love songs in bird-speak As if willing me to dance *!* Songs of the feathered ones I somehow grasped to be lullabies To a lonely soul pouring pain Realising the end of night And that another storm had passed I could try and find sleep *!* |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Light crimsoned twilight Spread its young new-born wings Over the summer earth As little winged friends Chirped love songs in bird-speak As if willing me to dance *!* Songs of the feathered ones I somehow grasped to be lullabies To a lonely soul pouring pain Realising the end of night And that another storm had passed I could try and find sleep *!* Sudhir-beautifully written and your imagery was astounding.......many times have I felt like this and have not been able to express it in any way....you have done so not only with completeness but with a haunting beauty as only you could do. Great one.  |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Hearing the world awaken after a sleepless night gives one faith that all is right...enchanting dawn never say never |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Mark, "haunting beauty" is an exceptional feeling... Thanks Paula, enchanting dawn... WOW... thanks regards, sudhir |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Exceptional... "Songs of the feathered ones I somehow grasped to be lullabies To a lonely soul pouring pain" very exceptional... |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
As if loosening itself From the dimming necklace Of the melting night *!* Light crimsoned twilight Spread its young new-born wings Over the summer earth Beautiful..... rosepetals [This message has been edited by rosepetals25 (edited 08-07-2000).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Karilea, Exceptional, you say... wow how uplifting it is to hear the word... Thanks rosepetals, Thanks a lot for the "beautiful"... regards to the both of you, Sudhir |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
THe word "beautiful" fails to describe this poem add " absolutely" and it still doesn't express the splendour of this poem. Maybe beauty squared and multiplied by 50. I was never any good at maths so I don't know if that even adds up. "To the centre of the city where all roads meet, waiting for you,To the depths of the ocean where all hopes sank, searching for you," Joy divison |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Sudhir ... I believe this might be my favorite of yours thus far! Incredible imagery ... simply lulled me into a whistful and melodic trance ... beautiful! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Hi Sudhir Iyer, Oh my, and to think that I almost went by. I should lock myself in the bedroom for thinking such a thing. Magnificent as always, true to form, and I am so very glad that I came by. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
brian, heartfelt thanks to you, my friend for your more than kind words... Kit, That this led you to a tranced state makes me feel happy... Thanks Bill, Thanks a bunch for coming by... regards, sudhir |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I like the "footsteps of the distant rising dawn"... Nicely done...  |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
Oh dear, If I copied all the lines I enjoyed here, I would simply be reprinting the entire poem again! A beautiful piece of imagery "A clay pot sitting in the sun will always be a clay pot. It has to go through the white heat of the furnace to become porcelain." --Mildred W. St |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Nan, I am honoured... Thanks Tess, I am glad that you enjoyed... Thanks regards to you both Sudhir |
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