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Tossed into the sea |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Tossed into the sea A world of magic fell in line When I was yours and you were mine. A realm was made in timeless time For you and I in verse and rhyme. There was no sun, no moon, no stars Only enchantment that was ours. A world of feel and touch and flight That formed a sphere of mystic light. A meeting of two butterflies That danced and spun a lullaby Into a sphere of magic sweet Suspended till again they meet. And endless is this myth of bliss That lingers on her touch and kiss. Her essence made a new world light And one I dream of ever night. A Shangri -la that melts away But lives forever and a day. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Seymour, I believe this is the first writing of yours that I have had the pleasure of reading. I am very glad that I came by. I love the way you put your words together in this poem of yours. I will look for your place once again. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
What beautiful tight rhyming lines, they just flow so smoothly....excellent poetic craft.. I am only half way there with the title but I am going to read it a couple more times as I love the way the whole work goes....well done!! |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
WOW Seymour! I loved this ... the rhythm and rhyme are superb, the flow is wonderful ... and the thoughts are so tender and sweet! Well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Seymour, a beautiful and very magical piece. excellently penned. "To the centre of the city where all roads meet, waiting for you,To the depths of the ocean where all hopes sank, searching for you," Joy divison |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ How graceful is your offering - Oh my ! This is stunning. 'There was no sun, no moon, no stars Only enchantment that was ours. A world of feel and touch and flight That formed a sphere of mystic light. A meeting of two butterflies That danced and spun a lullaby Into a sphere of magic sweet Suspended till again they meet.' Lyrically lilting verses! Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Bill, Thank you so much. Ethome, Thanks for the well done Kit, Thanks for the WOW. Brian, Thanks for the magical. Marge, LOve ya too. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is a beautiful, magical poem One of my favorites Must I say this in French? Liz |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, It might help. Love Sy |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I think I'll just toss you into the sea instead. Liz |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is enchanting, Sy! Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, How cruel. Sy Denise, Thank you dear. *L* |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Seymour, this has to be one of my favorite pieces read. The lyrical flow is wonderful. Going back for another read. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Eloise, Thank you so much. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Sheer briliance... pure poetry... Seymour, WOW regards, sudhir |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir Thank you my friend. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Seymour, This is a wonderfully written piece. A delightful and magical work.  )Michael |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sy, so now I know who made the light the magic of love the twinkling so bright... twas you! and in all splendor be the one who spins reality. Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Auguste, Thank you for the beautiful comment. Sunshine, Yes you are all that and more. *L* |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Ahhhhh, magic is in the air tonight! This was a beautiful, your words are so graceful, I loved it all......... Jenn E |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Sorry I'm late, Sy. Lotsa bugs, you know....excellent writing here |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Jenn E, Thank you so much, beautiful comment. Balladeer, Your beginning to bug me. Thanks |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Sy, Oh you paint such sweet love on high, just simply beautiful, thank you. Love, Cerenity  "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Both stunning and serene, Seymour. I could have sworn I had responded to this already, but I must have dreamed it. ~ Claire |
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