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jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

0 posted 2000-08-06 02:56 PM

Blue Velvet Above

Blue velvet
above satin sheets
our bodies between
where flesh doth meet,
Two hearts in love
that madly beat,
passionately drumming
through waves of heat.
Two souls entwined,
mellow and slick,
your love and mine
so heavy and thick;
I kiss the thoughts
going round my head
as I look at you
beside me
in the bed…
such thoughts I have,
such longing for you;
sleep my love,
we're one
not two.

w. james beard, jr.

[This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 08-06-2000).]

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2000-08-06 03:35 PM

And then you let her sleep...

you're on a roll...

Karilea
When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

2 posted 2000-08-06 03:37 PM

great descriptions of intense intimacy.... very well done!

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

3 posted 2000-08-06 03:59 PM

Thanks ethome for your comments...and the read, and thank you sunshine for helping me SEE....

jwesley

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

4 posted 2000-08-06 04:08 PM

jwesley, a beautiful poem very sensual.

"To the centre of the
city where all roads
meet, waiting for you,To the depths of the ocean where all hopes sank,
searching for you," Joy divison

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

5 posted 2000-08-06 04:29 PM

Thanks, ya'll, it now has what I think is the final revision.

jwesley

Kit McCallum

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Member Laureate

since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

6 posted 2000-08-06 04:32 PM

Definiately keep as the final version James ... this is absolutely perfect!!! Such wonderful sentiments and passions entwined within these words ... lovely!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

7 posted 2000-08-06 04:34 PM

Seduction of true love's intimacy.....Superb verse and I agree....keep it as is now....it is perfect..

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

8 posted 2000-08-06 04:44 PM

jwesley,
So intimate, and written so well. I will think of this tonight, as I lay alone in that big bed.

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

9 posted 2000-08-06 09:28 PM

Thanks, Kit and Mark...I'll leave it as it is though I was giving it other thought. And Bill, I appreciate your kind words also.

jwesley

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

10 posted 2000-08-06 10:09 PM

Superb, sensual,( hope I can have that feeling again soon). You make the reader feel very involved in the moment.
catalinamoon

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