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Nine Lives Drift...my 1000th post wow!
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Nine Lives Drift...my 1000th post wow! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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oh out on the street where the ladies are heady they walk an old walk they tell an old tale and the story's the same they're easy they're ready while crusing for tricks on the neon trail. it's a high horse night the chances are doubled some sad stories will come to an end it's risky and tough and riddled with trouble with drifters and grifters and johns never been. the lushes with lucre are strangers who make it roll'em to the palace where nine lives drift the scent of the hunt eroding their patience for the play at pleasures that they can dismiss. and nine lives drift over the canyons over the mountains and over the seas over the meadows and sparkling fountains over the rivers and through the trees into the caverns and into the trade winds into the hour glass falling and free. oh the night was set the play was rowdy young Gale was shick with diamonds and grit when a stranger relayed his desire to booty her place at the palace where nine lives drift. oh lay the bills down the hallways were humming and wine glasses clinked to the times and the night when in through the door burst four masked gunmen their gun barrels gleamed in the chandlier light. Gale's limp arm the stranger grabbed running she screamed as he pulled her through the fire escape. they fell to the street as they were gunning the ladies and johns in the lounge for their take. The gale held stranger chilled with the danger her body was wet and her nails dug sound away from the gory carnage that famed there they fled from death by devils blood hounds. the sirens were wailing the palace was silent at the end of nine lives in a source blood red the scene through a desolate prism of violence was haunting the palace where nine lives drift. they walk an old walk they tell an old tale with a swan dive waiting to finish their shift but out in the country you can see Gale raising her children with eight lives to give. and nine lives drift over the canyons over the mountains and over the seas over the meadows and sparkling fountains over the rivers and through the trees into the caverns and into the trade winds into the hour glass falling and free. This is based on a true story from the archives of my Scottish English descent. Apparently the stranger took young Gale and married her and they lived happily for the rest of their lives. Her past never came up in all the years they were married...but the story was also told to me by my Scottish story telling Grandfather (Thyrle Foster) so the truth may be bent a little. The nine lives drift part is meant to describe how this age old business of prostitution seems to sift into every element of society like the mystic nature of the cat.....so called cat houses...... |
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T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
you've told this beautifully... this is a great story... congrats on 1000! keep it up ethome  tony |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
wow E...wasn't too long ago I congratulated you on another milestone..sighhhhhh it's so hard to keep up with all these wonderful poems ~~soft hugs Maureen |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
The gale held stranger chilled with the danger her body was wet and her nails dug sound away from the gory carnage that famed there they fled from death by devils blood hounds. the sirens were wailing the palace was silent at the end of nine lives in a source blood red the scene through a desolate prism of violence was haunting the palace where nine lives drift. Excellent stuff Ethome, Congards on the 1000th post. "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
ethome, What a wonderful poem for 1000th So well written. Congrats on your 1000th post. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Pure Excellence...great story, great title, great poet!!! Congratulations, ethome! and an awesome post! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much Tony, Maureen and Brian you support means more to me than you know. I will be looking for you always... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ What a delightful ballad you've sung. Adventure and romance tied up in a neat bundle. I love it. Congratulations, my friend. The 1000th is presented with class, style and a touch of intrigue. You've a nifty talent for sharing. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I'm in with the others when I say that this is an excellent choice for your milestone. The way you have told the story is captivating to say the least and the feeling I got from reading was brought on by your attention to imagery...Superbly done...and many congrats on your 1000th post.....I will be looking for it and all the ones in between. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
E-baby...this rocks I do so love your rhymes... Congrats on your landmark post my friend.. thank you for making so many of them on my work... take care dear poet jm |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Rosepetals and Serenity I appreciate your support very much. Serenity did you notice what has been missing lately? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
ain't it nice? just when I was planning a "couchon de lait!" |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
ethome, ...CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR 1000 posts... You, my friend, have penned a masterpiece here.... what a story you have told and in what an expressive fashion... I have to come back to read this many more times.... regards, sudhir |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks so much Marge for your support and for the wonderful comments. Thanks Janet I'm glad this rocks, coming from such a great poet friend it means so much to me. Mark thank you so much for your kind words and the promise of future visits. I will be reading your fine words also. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wow!!! Ethome, I really loved this! Bravo!! You have written a wonderful tale...had me enthralled! I'm sure it was made even better with your grandfather's bend and yours...You did a remarkable job with this. Oh, and congratulations! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Congrats times 1000 my young friend...you knew I would like this masterpiece of history...thanks for the tale well told... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Oh, those Scottish are wonderful story tellers and do love to embellish a tale a bit, but that what makes them so intriguing, as this poem was from beginning to end. Wonderful! Liz |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Serenity I don't know what a couchon of milk is supposed to be but I'm glad you did'nt have to go through a lot of work for...well you know.. Thanks so much Sudhir "masterpiece" is a high word of praise coming from a poet of your abilities. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Applause and Congratulations on 1000 Ethome! What a wonderful ballad to mark this milestone! Much enjoyed! And from one wee part-Scottish lass, I'll lift me glass and say: "To a thousand more ... 'Aye ... there's the rrrub!" Best wishes, /Kit |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Martie for your words about the story line, much appreciated. Thanks for your kind words Sunshine one word in particular. Thank you Elizabeth my dear poet friend as one who admires your work very much I certainly appreciate your comments. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Beautiful storytelling, loved it. Catalinamoon |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Kit a wee bit of a Scottish lass for your always so kind words. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I sit at your feet spellbound...all I can say is MORE MORE MORE....congrats friend never say never |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
The Millepost! Great story! Loved it. Congratulations!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Paula your comments are so sincere and kind...thank you very much. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
a fantastic ballad - ethome - brought back memories of Robert Service and for a while I thought it was about Nevada - moreover although I've never attempted a ballad - (and I'll probably write a few before I come even close to writing one this good - you've inspired me to try. |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Beautiful story you have told here. Congrats on your 1000th post. WOW, you must feel great inside. Jenn E |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
ethome, trully wonderful story, should be song in the grand old Celtic tridition I think. Congrats on the big 1000th. Parker |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you WY and good luck with the ballad I'll be looking for it. Thank you Jenn E for your kind comments. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sorry I missed you Parker thanks for dropping in. I'll think about that Celtic music suggestion ...thanks again! |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Wow Ethome, how intrigued I was with this. Totally fascinating. And a big ole congrats on your 1000th post!!! Take care, Juls |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Juls for your kind words...much appreciated. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
ethome ~ I am still sitting here with mouth agape and eyes smiling. Your penchant for storytelling has been revealed in a most agreeable light, my friend. This feels classic ~ *Congratulations on your milestone!* ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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oh2beme Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 215NV USA |
Now that I have read some of your work, I can truly say Magnificent!!! You tell this story with great accentuation. Very well done my friend!!!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Claire much appreciated words of kindness...thanks for the "classic" comment. Thank you o2beme for your comments they mean so much to me. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
ethome ... congradulations ... you really have an exceptional talent I guess we'll keep you for another 100,000 or so |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Rex I hope I have another 100,000 in me.......we'll talk after the next 10,000.. I'll be looking for you..thanks again. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
wow ethome what a wonderful tale, very discriptive and captivating...well done Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Congratulations! 1000 ! wow I can tell you put a lot of work into this and it was great! Kathleen |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
And a fine tale told to mark this grand occasion!! Congratulations ethome. . . now. . . on to the next 1,000!!!!! -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
ethome...I have NO idea how I missed this one. Fantastic writing!!!! and congrats on the grand! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you so much Tracie, Irish Rose, Sven and Balladeer your comments are appreciated more than I can express. |
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