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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Meadow DaysWith shaded eyes I cast my gaze 'pon memories of our meadow days and in my lapse from present time I travel there within my mind To fancied frolics in the green and lightened laughter, love serene And stirring moments in the sun when hearts would merge, and beat as one And in your arms, I breathed again the fragrant spice of healing rain And shelter's song, your serenade in the meadow where our music played But tender tones were not enough and meadow's earth fell ragged, rough And trust, uprooted, lay to waste by hurtful acts and hands of haste Soon meadow's blossoms failed to yield as deeds betrayed the thriving field And stems and stamen stiffly spoiled as from deceit their leaves recoiled And now I grow in ache and grief Our meadow days of beauty, brief The moistened earth replaced with sand in memories of our loving land |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
Meadowmuse, I can't even choose a word, phrase or verse that is more wonderful or meaningful than another...I love the entire poem... ~~soft smiles Maureen |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Meadowmuse, My goodness, this is lovely. And to think that I almost went right on by. I should know better. Your poetry is excellent. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Meadowmuse this is so well done! I love the content and what makes it so good is the perfect meter and rhythum, it just flows like a beautiful river....thoroughly enjoyed reading this! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire--wonderful comparison...beautifully done poem...So sad to see verdent turn to fallow on land and especially in the heart. I just love the way you write! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Love your imagery! Your work is reliable in its excellence! |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Claire, Both beautiful and tragic at the same time. The imagery is excellent. Wonderful, my friend Michael |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Even the brightest star will finally fade, but we should continue to cherish what it was, Grasshopper (lol). Well there is my wise words for the day. no seriously, Claire a wonderfully written poem, a pleasure as always to read your poetry. "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Maureen, thank you for reading, being so kind in your response, and sharing your soft smiles with me. Bill, what?? You almost passed up my poem?? *shaking head* Then I am twice as pleased that "something" nudged you to read it!  Thank you, sincerely, Bill. ethome, so pleased that you enjoyed this. I do strive toward acceptable meter when I write, and I thank you for noticing. You're so kind to let me know. Martie, thank you, dear. I must agree with you, and yes, I know this is a sad subject, but there it was, wanting to come out today. Sometimes I don't know whether to feel blessed or cursed by this thing we call poetry. serenity, thank you so much for reading and letting me know so nicely that you enjoyed this . Michael, thank you, my friend. I know you understand my need to write this piece. Master Brian, I thank you for your kind and sapient counsel today... ~~ and for liking my poem ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Immensely pleasure, this reader finds his thoughts well fed and satisfied.... claire... this is wonderful expression... lovely images too as always... regards, sudhir |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Claire~ Anything with your name on it is an automatic draw to me ... I spotted this one this morning and decided to save it to savor on the 'quilting hour'. I'm so pleased with the gift I found - 'And in your arms, I breathed again the fragrant spice of healing rain And shelter's song, your serenade in the meadow where our music played' Even though there was a sadness to it ... it was seemingly something you felt and chose to share in such a beautiful way. Your gifting is openly appreciated here. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh Claire ... this just flowed like a sweet and tender melody! Beautiful rhythm and rhyme ... with such expressive and image-filled sentiments. Stunning! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Sudhir, your words here are always so kind...thank you. Marge, thank you for the "savoring" my friend. Yes, I know it is sad, but there is often grief among the grinning, as Grandmother used to say. Thank you so for your thoughts. Kit, you have such a nice way of letting one know when you've enjoyed a poem. Thank you so much for reading this . ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Again, I stand in awe of your talent, Claire. This one leaves me speechless. Denise |
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Majestic Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 264houston, tx. |
very beautiful...excellent rhyme....thanks for the great read... "To live is to love; To truly LOVE is to live!" ~kg~ |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
This was amazing.........the flow of it all the descriptive overtones...........what an image this paints..............Thank You Jenn E |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Denise, you always show so much enthusiasm and encouragement for the words and efforts of your fellow poets here, and I would like to thank you, in earnest, for all that you do and say. You are a remarkable person. (((you))) Majestic, thank you for reading, and for such a nice response! Jenn E, you are very gracious with your words... thank you! ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And in your arms, I breathed again the fragrant spice of healing rain And shelter's song, your serenade in the meadow where our music played But tender tones were not enough and meadow's earth fell ragged, rough And trust, uprooted, lay to waste by hurtful acts and hands of haste Soon meadow's blossoms failed to yield as deeds betrayed the thriving field And stems and stamen stiffly spoiled as from deceit their leaves recoiled And now I grow in ache and grief Our meadow days of beauty, brief The moistened earth replaced with sand in memories of our loving land =========================== no one does this.. this well... so exquisite in its sad beauty... such grace Claire...your muse is divine take care jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Janet Marie, thank you for your very gracious words, my friend. I'm glad you enjoyed this. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
My wish is that your next happy meadow lasts forever Claire ... and can't wait to read the poems you'll breathe Rex |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Oh Rex, what an adorable thing to say to someone...I just hope it happens before we're both too old to read or write. Thank you, dear. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Claire, can I borrow the window to the world that you look out of?? Just wonderful my friend. . . amazing. . . --------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
just simply life wistful as it is yuh |
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kcl New Member
since 2000-08-08
Posts 3 |
I'M NOT A VERY GOOD CRITIC AND ALL I CAN SAY IS.... WHAT A WONDERFUL POEM!!!!!!!!!!! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Sven, how about I just move over a bit and you can join me? Thanks for reading, my friend. Walt, yuh...life is wistful, to be sure. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece...thank you for letting me know. kcl, you needn't be a critic to enjoy poetry, it's more a state of mind. Thank you for your kind words and Welcome to Passions!~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
there will be a meadow for one as lovely as you...one that will ever be green and flower filled...kissed by gentle rains and butterfly dances never say never |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
...grief in the grinning... I like that. So true, but the same reversed..."grinning in the grief." Like this... heartfilled drama of days gone by. Those days make us who we are, mold our memories and give us a means for comparison. It would be hard to compare to an image like this one lady! Also, loved the alliteration, liberaly spread, yet ne'r so much as to be an impediment to the flow as it rolls off the tongue. Hugs m'friend.  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I enjoyed reading this return to the meadow...it seems sometimes our lives is broken down into parts...we love...we hurt..we heal...we wait...we love again... I can't wait for the love part to come back with all it pleasure and intensity...James |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Paula, such kind and tender words ...thank you so much. Chris, I so appreciate your critical read, and your sweet words, my friend. Hugs back. James, yes, that is precisely how it is ... the cycle of life in the meadow. Thank you James, for reading and sharing your thoughts. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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