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Tess
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since 2000-03-22
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Australia

0 posted 2000-08-06 07:00 AM


A soft cloud of feathers
cushions my weary head.
Troublesome thoughts melt
quickly into nothingness,
a smile dances on my lips.
Eyes happily close
as you come to me in my dreams.

In my mind
I replay memories of you.
An imprint of your touch
is captured on my heart,
to feel while you are gone.
I wait and wonder,
how long will it be,
until you are with me?

From my window the dark velvet sky,
laden heavy
with her precious sparkling lights,
takes your name from my lips,
and a kiss too,
to deliver to you,
somewhere beneath the same sky.

When you catch it will you smile?
As I smile when I dream of you
and of our love,
together for eternity.

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[This message has been edited by Tess (edited 08-06-2000).]

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ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
1 posted 2000-08-06 07:08 AM


Beautiful captivated dreams of a distant love.....The words running in such beautiful lines of yearning imagery....Very well done!!
Tess
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since 2000-03-22
Posts 288
Australia
2 posted 2000-08-06 08:57 AM


Thanks for your comment. Funny how when you miss someone it helps to write about it  
Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
3 posted 2000-08-06 09:06 AM


Lovely dreams of that love there girl....your imagery within the verse shines through brightly and the sentiment floats in the air with tenderness across those miles.      Loved it.

[This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 08-06-2000).]

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4 posted 2000-08-06 09:21 AM


Tess~
This is so romantically done !

'the dark velvet sky,
laden heavy
with her precious sparkling lights,
takes your name from my lips,
and a kiss too,
to deliver to you,
somewhere beneath the same sky'

Wonderful thoughts.
~*Marge*~



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MMoonchild
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since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715
PA
5 posted 2000-08-06 10:10 AM


From my window the dark velvet sky,
laden heavy
with her precious sparkling lights,
takes your name from my lips,
and a kiss too,
to deliver to you,
somewhere beneath the same sky.

I happen to agree with Marge aand this verse   I felt deeply

nice writing, Tess
~~soft smiles
Maureen

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
6 posted 2000-08-06 12:23 PM


Hi Tess....
      
         Ah...this one has a soft, tender
     feel that I like very much!!
              Beautiful writing....


I have but one goal in
life.........
To make you smile!
~~ Sunny ~~


Tess
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since 2000-03-22
Posts 288
Australia
7 posted 2000-08-07 07:17 AM


Thanks Mark, your comment is almost poetry in itself!

Marge, you guessed it, I'm a hopeless romantic!

Thanks for stopping by to comment Maureen

Sunny, so good to know you enjoyed it!



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