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Nikolette Sadness
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0 posted 2000-08-06 02:41 AM


i don't knwo waht to call this...any suggestions?

try to hide what i feel,
what they see is no real.

all my thoughs keep me away
yet the pain makes life stay.

cant you see my pain?
you dont feel the strain
all emotions drain
i'm no longer sane.

tears hit the ground
like trees falling down
fear builds all around
i wont be found.

seeing such destruction,
i cannot function.

Nikolette Sadness


i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness.

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Kyle Finn
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since 2000-08-05
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Linn, MO USA
1 posted 2000-08-06 03:08 AM


great work,and it is hard to call it somethin but maybe call it....The Way I Feel or somethin like that? i dont know but its a great poem keep it up
Nikolette Sadness
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2 posted 2000-08-06 03:26 AM


well thanx for the suggestion but i think i'll just keep it as untitled...
Nik

i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness.

David D
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3 posted 2000-08-06 03:54 AM


I read your poem, and at times in my life I can relate.  How 'bout calling it "My Pain"
Nikolette Sadness
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4 posted 2000-08-07 12:10 PM


can't call it that cuz i already have one called...'the pain' too confusing for my files
Nik

i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness.

Majestic
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since 2000-01-11
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houston, tx.
5 posted 2000-08-07 12:30 PM


Maybe i'm out in left field here...but this sounds like a suicide note....(very well written of course).. or someone very seriously contemplating suicide....I hope very much that i am wrong...but i knew a young girl that killed herself when she was 14..so it's kinda hard for me to keep my opinions on the matter to myself...email me if you ever need to talk..Majestic@ev1.net

"To live is to love; To truly LOVE is to live!" ~kg~



Alle'cram
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since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816
Texas
6 posted 2000-08-08 07:36 PM


Hi Niko,
  Great job expressing your feelings. If you continue writing about your feelings it will help. "Therapy", "Destruction","Fear",
"Talking out loud", some titles that come to mind.   Bless you Niko and please take the above poster (Majestic) up on his offer if in fact these thoughts have occured to you. You are among friends.   marcy

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