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Michael G
Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579
Nashville

0 posted 2000-08-05 07:28 PM


For my senses
that you awake
And my hearts
primal shake
Of the deeds
we have done
Or the peace
we have one
I would stay
and collapse
As my souls
stops beating fast
For the pain
is not as great
When our bodies
stop the ache
Of the simple
pleasures within
The ones where
hands can get to
As we touch
each others soul
The heat rises
out of control
And the sweet
serenity comes
From the moment
we are one
'Tis my dream
of wanting this
That movement
as we kiss
And pleasures
of the skin
We can not control
so we begin
As the time
comes to us
The time to
finish one another
Collapse to me
and my heart
For one last
night of love.

© Copyright 2000 Michael G - All Rights Reserved
Sunnyone
Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
1 posted 2000-08-05 08:07 PM


Michael...
          This has a very sensual mood
          about it, and you wrote it very
          very well!!
            "...and my heart's primal shake"
          That is definitely a power line!!
                    Loved it!!


I have but one goal in
life.........
To make you smile!
~~ Sunny ~~


Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-08-05 08:34 PM


oohhhhhhhhhhhhhh yessssssssss
smoke and steam in the forums  
me likes.. but then you already knew that..
didnt ya  
soulful and sensual MG...
heavenly combination
JM

There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~


jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
3 posted 2000-08-05 08:57 PM


Well, for a change, I'm not gonna ditto anyone...just say, well done, my friend, and leave it at that.

jwesley

rosepetals25
Deputy Moderator 5 Tours
Member Elite
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076
PA
4 posted 2000-08-05 10:11 PM


Michael,

       Hmmmmm.. what a very sensual poem. I like I like..    Well done.

                     rosepetals25

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