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spiked
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since 2000-01-13
Posts 873
Hammond, La USA

0 posted 2000-08-05 05:32 PM



A comment said
But just in jest
A lingering thought
In the mind to fest.

Engulf you in
This world of mine
Introduce you to
My thoughts sublime.

Capture all
You feel and see
Consume you in
This hell that’s me

There’s no escape
Your will is gone
I creep through you
From dusk till dawn

So keep your strength
And use it when
The snakebites gone
And I bite again

For with each turn
There starts anew
Feel me as
I slide around you

And I look real deep
Into your eyes
Hypnotic trance
That tells no lies

It tells me all
I need to know
I feel you melt
You try to go

So lie there gently
On my chest
Slide your nails
Show your unrest

This tease has taken you
Far beyond
That which you
Had envisioned

True seduction
Is just the sequenced rhythm
Of two hearts
That beat as one.


[This message has been edited by spiked (edited 08-06-2000).]

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serenity blaze
Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

1 posted 2000-08-05 05:52 PM


I like this one....time for voodoo...serenity's snake dance...grins to you...hugs.
Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-08-06 02:35 AM


Capture all
You feel and see
Consume you in
This hell that’s me

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This tease has taken you
Far beyond
That which you
Had envisioned

True seduction
Is just the sequenced rhythm
Of two hearts
That beat as one.

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oooooh i love this cryptic spell of a poem
very very cool...
excellent words choices and phrasing ..
enjoyed this muchly
and i dont know about you Rich...
but I'd pay money to see Sen do
that dance  
later-snake-eyes-gators
jm

spiked
Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873
Hammond, La USA
3 posted 2000-08-06 01:30 PM


Serenity will expect you to hold true to the snake dance lol
Thanks
and JM
If you'd like I can charge admission
thank you both very much
Rich

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