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Missing You Still
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Missing You Still |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
I've not heard from you in quite some time. If I called you, would I be out of line? I don't know why you drifted away. But if I saw you, what would I say? You're still in my mind and in my heart. But time has passed and we grew apart. I feel I was abandoned long ago. Where are you, and why did you go? I wrote you a letter that I never sent. Telling you how much to me you meant. I still have not forgotten you yet. And though you're gone, I have no regrets. Your heart was wild and hard to tame. But since you've been gone, things aren't the same. I need a soft place to land as our paths collide. It's hard to find the words of how I feel inside. This wasn't where we wanted to be. But you'll forever be a part of me. In the dim misty moonlight, Thoughts are floating through the night. I send this wish, from here to the nearest star. Happiness for you, wherever you are. So with thoughts of you and a wistful sigh, In the gentle wind I whisper good-bye. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Eloise~ Goodbyes are sometimes so hard ... and then to read the softness of this is a gentle comforting gesture. 'In the dim misty moonlight, Thoughts are floating through the night' What a 'floaty' thought.  I enjoyed the sincerity of your heart in this piece. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Eloise~ This is so soft a goodbye...so tenderly written with a soft sad beauty Hugs Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wonderful piece of work Eloise..such a tender touching but sad time. Very well done! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Oh, Eloise, The line: "I need a soft place to land as our paths collide.." That one is so descriptive, and I don't know how many times I've desperately wished for that very same soft place!! Excellent writing, my friend!! I have but one goal in life......... To make you smile! ~~ Sunny ~~ |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A nice expression of your longing and uncertainy...James |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
WOW---this is beautiful from start to finish. The longing for answers and the pain of lost trust are very vivid. Great read. |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Thank you all so much for reading and writing. They all mean so much. Good-byes are always one of those difficult moments to get through. But, up ahead there always seems to be a rainbow just waiting. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Sometimes it takes quite a long time to be able to say that final goodbye. Very beautifully written! Denise |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
A person never wants to say good bye......reading this filled me with so much emotion. Why must people part? Jenn E |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I think you just penned from my heart.....I went through the same not long ago......then a note out of no where.....still no answers though...lol Excellent writing of this rollercoaster ride. |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Thank you Denise. Always enjoy your kind words. I agree Jenn. But I guess it just part of the circle of life. BDC, thank you and I hope it all works out for you. Good-byes are never easy. |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
This is an excellent goodbye piece, Eloise. My favorite line was, "it's hard to find the words of how I feel inside." Great expression and a very heartfelt piece. Nathan |
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