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Inside this tunnel |
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courtney923 Junior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 43 |
Bought my mind, but pawned it back Something lost, and out of whack Hold it out, and down the sack Wasted knots, and foolish tricks Played the song, and broke the set Rocked it out, made them stick Melody of mahem, and goddess of fools Reached the top, to fall right through Having a mind, is only a waste Using it hurts, and gives off hate Emotions of prison, lead me to pain Nothing is right, but I still wait Reaching the breaking, of my last point Inside this tunnel, without a light |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Courtney* This is powerfully woven with ache and pain as if it were written with tears. |
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courtney923 Junior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 43 |
I believe it was, written with tears. Thank you! I appreciate the responce. |
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angelsamongus Member
since 2000-05-27
Posts 70New York |
Courtney This poem is excellent, you held my attention from the very first line! My 2 favorite lines are "Bought my mind, but pawned it back" and "Melody of mahem, and goddess of fools" I am an frequent visitor to this tunnel too... Lori |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
I was with you all the way but a mind is never a waste, look what you wrote with that great tool..  HUGS Hope it gets better for you.. "If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put the foundations under them." |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
courtney, interesting read.... though I believe that the light at the end of the tunnel is inside of us, and we can make it brighter even when it seems so dark..... Loved the read. Parker |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
This is a very powerful piece, Courtney. I feel your pain and I can sometimes relate to what you're saying too. Nathan |
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courtney923 Junior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 43 |
Thanks to you all! |
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guiliano New Member
since 2000-08-04
Posts 8new york city |
dear courtney, i loved the first line.....boom!!!!! and the poem rolled like a river rapids on my weary mind.....girl you got deep heart deep soul it shows,,,,!!!!!!! i loved this extract  :Played the song, and broke the set Rocked it out, made them stick Melody of mahem, and goddess of fools Reached the top, to fall right through Having a mind, is only a waste ....i am enthralled and wide-eyed...... guiliano(**) "Takes it easy, baby Take it as it comes Don't move too fast And you want your love to last Oh, you've been movin' much too fast"=(The Doors) |
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