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Sunnyone
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since 2000-07-06
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Staffordshire, England

0 posted 2000-08-03 03:27 PM



      I have often thought about you
         and the dreams we used to
                 share...
      When you held me by the hours..
         Now they seem so hard to
                  bear..
      I don't know what came between
                   us..
      I awoke, and you were gone..
      Now from this lonely heart,
      I'm sending you my last love song....


      Just a song to say I'm hoping
         that you found your dream somewhere..
      There are many miles between us,
         but you know I'll always
                  care..
      We can't see where life will take us..
         If the choice was right or
                  wrong..
                    So......
      I'm looking back on happy memories..
            In my last love song...


  
(This is the first song I ever wrote, and I
    thought I would give it a new home here..)

© Copyright 2000 Sunnyone - All Rights Reserved
Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26
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Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
1 posted 2000-08-03 03:29 PM


... and I am so glad that you shared this with us....

regards to you sunny1,
Sudhir

Sunnyone
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Staffordshire, England
2 posted 2000-08-03 03:37 PM


Sudhir...
         It is so very good to be able to
  share here on this site. I love to read
  all the thoughts and feelings from friends
  such as yourself, and to have replies
  from you are priceless!!
         Thank you so very much...
                it means a lot to me!


I have but one goal in
life.........
To make you smile!
~~ Sunny ~~


Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
3 posted 2000-08-03 03:55 PM


OK, we need SOUND now! The lyrics DO sing... I heard EVERY note!

Karilea
When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ

Bill Charles
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since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now
4 posted 2000-08-03 05:58 PM


Sunny,
Let me get my little ole guitar and put some notes to this. I know you said it is already to notes, but I've never heard it. So, I'll see what I can do. Is your photo getting more enhanced, or are my eyes playing tricks?

Sunnyone
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Staffordshire, England
5 posted 2000-08-03 06:36 PM


Sunshine...
           It's one of those ethereal tunes
       that can sound any way you want.....
               (Thank you....)


I have but one goal in
life.........
To make you smile!
~~ Sunny ~~


Sunnyone
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since 2000-07-06
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Staffordshire, England
6 posted 2000-08-03 06:43 PM


Bill....

       Do you also play guitar, along with
   your beautiful writing???  Yes, it would
   be fun to get a fresh melody...it will be
   on a CD one of these days, as soon as I
   can figure out pc recording!!
       I'm not sure the photo enhancing is
   a good thing.....I'm not sure what is
   happening there!!
             Thank you also, my friend...


I have but one goal in
life.........
To make you smile!
~~ Sunny ~~


JulieAnn
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since 2000-06-12
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Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!!
7 posted 2000-08-03 06:54 PM


I like it....tahnk you for sharing.....Things alway sseem better when you look back on them.....absence makes the heart grow fonder and all of that....great writing...

Julie :)



Sunnyone
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Staffordshire, England
8 posted 2000-08-03 07:06 PM


JulieAnn....
            I always enjoy hearing from you,
   and want to thank you for replying!
         (Glad you liked this!)


I have but one goal in
life.........
To make you smile!
~~ Sunny ~~


ddgoose
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since 2000-07-25
Posts 250
Baltimore, MD, USA
9 posted 2000-08-03 09:26 PM


Sunny

Gulp, sniff, sniff.  Very pretty and sad at the same time.  Would love to hear played.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

10 posted 2000-08-03 11:28 PM


beautiful and most melodic..
the rhyme is delish  
lovely emotional piece here...
harmony in poetry...
perfect!!!
take care
jm

There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~


Jenn E
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since 2000-08-02
Posts 589
Kelowna, BC, Canada
11 posted 2000-08-03 11:41 PM


This was wonderful, Thanks for sharing it with all of us!  
Jenn E

Sven
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12 posted 2000-08-03 11:51 PM


And we shall take it (and you) to our hearts, and give both of you a home. . .

Wonderful my friend. . .

-------------------------------------------------------

That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song
13 posted 2000-08-03 11:55 PM


Guitar in hand....I think I will go join Bill now so we can whip up this tune for you.  Mind if I sit in Bill?LOL  beautiful words girl and they do deserve the notes of music to accompany them.
Eloise
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since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096
Wyoming
14 posted 2000-08-04 12:03 PM


Wonderful lyrics Sunny.  Very poignant feelings.
Sunnyone
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Staffordshire, England
15 posted 2000-08-04 12:42 PM


ddgoose....Yes, I guess it does have a little
           sad touch to it...
                  Thank you for reading!!

JM....Oh, poignant is such a good word for
      this...that's what I felt when I wrote
      it...........Thank you, also!!

Jenn E....Sharing here is such a pleasure
          that it's almost a sin!! Ha!!
          Thank you for enjoying this!



I have but one goal in
life.........
To make you smile!
~~ Sunny ~~


Sunnyone
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since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
16 posted 2000-08-04 12:48 PM


Sven....You just don't know how much I
        appreciated your reply! It's the
        dream of every gypsy like myself to
        finally have a home!!
                Thank you, good friend!!

Mark....with my synth and you and Bill on
        guitar....WOW....what sounds we could
        make!!! Seriously, I thank you for
        your reply and I'm glad you liked!!!
            (Is there a drummer out there?)

Eloise.....I am so glad you came by and
           enjoyed reading this.
                  Thank you, also!!!


I have but one goal in
life.........
To make you smile!
~~ Sunny ~~


Beth
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since 2000-07-06
Posts 468
WA, Australia
17 posted 2000-08-04 01:05 PM


~Sunny1,
Music definately needs to be put
to this..I can almost hear it now~
Beth


[This message has been edited by Beth (edited 08-04-2000).]

Beverley
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since 2000-07-09
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England
18 posted 2000-08-04 01:15 PM


Sunny that is wonderful, you obviously have even more talent than I thought! And I thought you were loaded with it anyway!

Sunnyone
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Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
19 posted 2000-08-04 01:30 PM


Hi Beth....
           It has a melody written for it,
       but I have been at my wit's end trying
       to figure out the Cakewalk software to
       record a WAV. file so that I can then
       put it to MP3!!  When I can do all of
       that, then I will be able to share it
       with all of you!!
               Thank you for reading it!!

Beverley....Thank you, my friend, but the
          inspiration that I receive comes
          directly from people like you, who
          share their thoughts and feelings.
               We all give to each other!


I have but one goal in
life.........
To make you smile!
~~ Sunny ~~


vandana
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USA
20 posted 2000-08-04 06:28 PM


I liked this much. Enjoyed it.!!!!
Nate Dogg
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since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton
21 posted 2000-08-04 07:14 PM


This is a good song, Sunny! I'll bet that you'll make a great songwriter one day.
Thanks for sharing!

Nathan

brian madden
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since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374
ireland
22 posted 2000-08-04 07:21 PM


Sunny a lovely written poem, would love to hear this in song.

"I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone"
manic street preachers

poutprincess
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since 2000-07-06
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Perth, Western Australia, Australia
23 posted 2000-08-04 07:37 PM


ah i can here this singing, my what a lovely voice you have! you are a treasure..and so is this song!
Sunnyone
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Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
24 posted 2000-08-05 02:31 AM


Hi Vandana...
             Just wanted to thank you for
            your kind reply and I'm glad
            you enjoyed this!

Hi Nate....Thank you, also, and yes..I too
           hope the songwriting pays one of
           these days. I play in a duo, so I
           get to play them onstage, but it
           would be nice to sell a few!!!!!

Hi Brian...I'm so glad you liked this....
           I am in the process of learning to
           record on the computer....then it
           will be time for the MP3!!

Hi poutprincess...You are such a gracious
                  lady, and always have such
                  supportive things to say!!
                  I always enjoy your replies
                  and glad I could 'sing' for
                            You!!


I have but one goal in
life.........
To make you smile!
~~ Sunny ~~


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