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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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Here she comes a toast to Dame Cover Girl a lust for cameras leaks through her stare. She'll pierce your heart and soul like an arrow She'll mix her magic into a snare. She'll knock on love's door and when she stuns you you're sure that she's not lying. But when she's done with her games you're left in misery and pain in the silence. Oh she'll sit near your corner in a low cut dress she's got legs forever and you're mind's in a mess. She smokes Parliment Lights and blows you a kiss. and she'll roll you her eyes she's a cat on the prowl she's got the scent of the moon and an angel's smile. Here she comes her finest face done in fashion a host of beauty secluding beware. She'll spread her vines around your blue passion she'll host your pride while you're unaware. She'll knock on love's door and when she stuns you you're sure that she's not lying. But when she's done with her games you're left in misery and pain in the silence. |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
its amazing..how we are all drawn to beauty of the skin...so many times left empty afterwards.....i love the descriptions in this poem, very much enjoyed! |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
ethome... Image is everything and nothing at the same time!! I enjoyed this very much... ~~ To Live is to Give ~~ |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Ethome~ This is a very enjoyable piece  Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I met this girl just the other night in Honolulu...she really gets around...or maybe there is more than one...look out guys...heartbreak city....James |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
This is a cool poem. I wonder if it's the same from a womens point of view? Looks can be the devil. Jon |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
ethome...what you see isnt always what you get...great work her friend...and JON...yes it is...a handsome face without the soul to go with it is just an empty shell. never say never |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ethome, very "Billy Joel" sounding...and that is a compliment... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
ethome, yeah a very enjoyable poem... regards, sudhir |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
ETHome~ A wonderfully enjoyable read. And my full-of-'Sunshine' friend is right ... it DOES have that Billy Joel feel. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I would like to thank all for their kind words of agreement. Jon I know there are men that act the same way and they are guilty of emotional rape. Beauty certainly is not the premiere quality one should seek when searching for a soul mate. I am not saying all beautiful women are like the one depicted in this poem but more often than not, it turns out that way. Thanks once again to all who appreciated the content of this poem. Special thanks to those two (M.T. & S} who likened this poem to a Billy Joel style song. I am going to kiss both of them just as soon as I can!! |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Fantastic imagery in this poem ethome...you captured the scene, the woman, the feeling and tied it all up with poetic talent. Well done! (PS...if I say Billy Joel, can I get a kiss too?) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
All you had to do was mention his name Martie, now there you are, on the kiss list. Thanks for the nice comment.....ethome.. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh boy...now I'm on a list... |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
She Is Suffering Beauty finds refuge in herself Lovers wrapped inside each others lies Beauty is such a terrible thing She is suffering yet more than death She is suffering She sucks you deeper in She is suffering You exist within her shadow Beauty she is scarred into man's soul A flower attracting lust, vice and sin A vine that can strangle life from a tree Carrion, surrounding, picking on leaves She is suffering She sucks you deeper in She is suffering You exist within her shadow Beauty she poisons unfaithful all Stifled, her touch is leprous and pale The less she gives the more you need her No thoughts to forget when we were children Richey Edwards. Ethome, a wonderfully written poem. lots to think about here. "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Yes Sunshine you are on a list.......however, if you wish to unsubscribe then I will be dissapointed but I will honour your wish reluctantly..... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Brian thanks for your in depth appreciation and the wonderful verses. I can see a reflection of you within the lines. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
ethome, wonderful write.... I'm sure I met her in Nova Scotia. James your right she get around..... She said she wasn't a shore girl, and I fell for it. Damn those shore girls, I love them all...  Well its warm I think I'll go fishing. Oh, and i'm not going to mention whats his name either.... Parker |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Great poem, Ethome! It's a shame that people play games like that. Denise |
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ddgoose Member
since 2000-07-25
Posts 250Baltimore, MD, USA |
Good description of a person that is a user. BEWARE - beauty is only skin deep. |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Tis true the saying "Beauty is only skin deep".........but I think we all at some point have to experience this to really understand. Funny, but in the long run they will be the ones in misery, pain, and silence. And we will be better of for learning their lesson. Sorry, I am rambling.......I liked it alot! Jenn E |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
ahhhhhhh but E. she may knock on your door...but you do not have to open.... ~~soft smiles Maureen |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
ethome* Great writing...much to be said for what lies within and you said alot of it! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
she's got the scent of the moon and an angel's smile. Here she comes her finest face done in fashion a host of beauty secluding beware. She'll spread her vines around your blue passion she'll host your pride while you're unaware. She'll knock on love's door and when she stuns you you're sure that she's not lying. But when she's done with her games you're left in misery and pain in the silence. Beautiful piece and much to consider and ponder. With the scent of the moon and an angel's smile.....how could any human man resist?!!!!!!??? Not gonna happen |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Parker...serves you right for fooling around with those eastern shore girls, they'll get ya evertime. I'm glad what's his name was not mentioned. Thanks again. Thank you Dsnyder for the comment I appreciate it so much. Thanks ddgoose...those users are out there and I feel sorry for them if that's all they're going to get out of life. Thanks Jenn E and I agree with you they will be the ones to end up lonely and sad. Thank you Maureen you are right the door does'nt have to be opened. Thank you Butterflies for the fine comments. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Funny how this is what society dictates that women strive for this, isn't it? Such a shallow, meaningless path, and yet men have fallen for it for years, being ruled by the wrong brain it would seem! Corinne |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Mark. There are so many things to look at but this does happen a lot. Thanks again for your comments I appreciate them. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Well Corinne I have to say there is a lot of truth to what you are saying. Thank you very much for your input. |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Great description, and great imagery of this piece about this woman Ethome. Unfortunately, I knew some ladies that fit your descripton and believe me, it doesn't feel good to have your love taken for granted. Thanks for sharing, Nathan |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Nate .. I know what you mean but I don't like to place all women in that catagory...I recieve them all as individuals .. as you can realize from reading at this poetry that there are so many women out there that are such beautiful people...thanks again |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
*sigh* Yes true, but then I have known many people who are users, attractive and not so, so you cant go on looks, or nonlooks alone. The only way I think is time. Eventually their true self shows through, its a shame we get hurt in the meantime. "A clay pot sitting in the sun will always be a clay pot. It has to go through the white heat of the furnace to become porcelain." --Mildred W. St |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Yes I know what you mean Tess and you are right. It just seems that more often than not the extremely attractive ones let it go to their head then it changes their perception of life.....Thanks very much for your comments, glad to hear from you. |
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Sigmund Freud Junior Member
since 2000-06-03
Posts 38Come to my couch... |
Ve are a very superficial society. It is very simple to veed out the unvanted's, ask her to puff on a big cigar, if she inhales it, thats the girl for you.... Freud |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
There seems to be quite a bit of innuendo in the wording of your comments..ha ha..thanks for dropping in to read. |
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