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Michael G
Senior Member
since 2000-06-25
Posts 579
Nashville

0 posted 2000-08-03 04:04 AM


I'm lost,
don't get me wrong
I fully understand
I see the reasoning
But I'm lost,
you quit your job
your moving
I see the reasoning
Yet I'm lost,
you say a mistake
you say three out of four
you wonder about it
I'm really lost,
why could'nt you stop
why could'nt you stay
why can't you love
I see the reasoning
I'm so lost,
That I see it all
that I question it
and I feel it
that I feel you
I'm lost,
yet I know
and this is my moment
my confusion
my heart screaming at the wind
to follow the path
Yet, I'm lost.

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Sunnyone
Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England
1 posted 2000-08-03 05:48 AM


Michael.....
            How many of us have felt like
             'screaming at the wind',
                     I wonder?
         This is a great read, and I like
         the way you always put the emotions
         right out front...that's where they
                     should be!!


I have but one goal in
life.........
To make you smile!



Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-08-03 08:57 AM


and I feel it
that I feel you
I'm lost,
yet I know
and this is my moment
my confusion
my heart screaming at the wind
to follow the path
Yet, I'm lost.
========================
as long as you can write about it and
work it out thru your poetry..
you wont become so lost that you cant find your way back...
i feel your pain in this..
and i know.
take care
jm

There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~


Tess
Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288
Australia
3 posted 2000-08-03 09:19 AM


Can understand and relate to those feelings that the writing refers too..like the short sharp little sentences too.

"Life is like music; it must be composed by ear, feeling, and instinct, not by
rule."~ Samuel Butler ~


Spirit2572
Junior Member
since 2000-07-29
Posts 15

4 posted 2000-08-03 09:22 AM


I can also relate with this poem.  Good job  


Spirit2572

Corinne
Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167
state of confusion
5 posted 2000-08-03 10:21 AM


Life can certainly be very frustrating and difficult to understand.

One small bone to pick, "couldn't" is the proper form for could not.

Corinne

Jenn E
Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589
Kelowna, BC, Canada
6 posted 2000-08-23 08:07 PM


Can I have permission to be lost with you? Sometimes our reasonings seem right by the greater number involved until you look at yourself, a number by itself, more alone now then ever. Your poetry speaks volumes here.....and we are all aloud our moment of confusion.  Understanding all you write.
Jenn E

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