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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Blood StreamI wish to lie upon the bank where the river's running deep Close my eyes in daylight's dream without the will to weep Release the sands of sorrow to the flow of freeing foam Each grain, a sharp reminder of the hauntings I have known But reverie's rhyme I cannot court upon the bonny green Love's lying face, soft smiling eyes, is seldom what it seems And a blood stream's turmoil torrent darkens dawn of day's depart In a rush of gushing current rolls its crimson 'cross my heart |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Terrific images here from you Claire... Love's lying face, soft smiling eyes, is seldom what it seems And a blood stream's turmoil torrent darkens dawn of day's depart In a rush of gushing current rolls its crimson 'cross my heart ..... WOW... ... is all I can manage for now... regards, sudhir |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire--you are one of my favorite poets...I look for your writing because it never dissapoints me...so well done, it is! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
WOW! I've read it three times now and am still assimilating! This is a poignant/powerful piece Claire... *shaking head* I don't know what to feel here, really...LOL This part: Close my eyes in daylight's dream without the will to weep Oh yes, what a wish!  Beautiful? Who knows, I love the imagery and the associations, and your pen has yet to fail me when I read what it's produced! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
So simple yet so majestic...James |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
This is an amazing poem Clair ... I read and pondered over it for about 15 min ... Kept reading things into it ... found it quite intriguing though slightly disturbing Rex |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
WOW Claire stunning piece. amazing. "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Sudhir, your "WOW" sounds wonderful this evening, and has "managed" to bring me a smile...thank you, my friend. Martie, thank you, my friend. It is a mutual admiration, for you are one of mine as well. Chris, another "WOW," and I am feeling quite flattered. Thank you so much for your thoughtful response...I love the way you "read" a poem. James, thank you. I was trying to keep it simple. Hope I did alright. Rex, thank you. That you would spend that much time with my poem is so encouraging. I understand what you mean about the "disturbing"...it is that, isn't it? Thank you for reading it. Brian, your "wow" means a lot to me, and I thank you. ~ Claire < !signature--> Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau [This message has been edited by Meadowmuse (edited 08-02-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
C, this is enchanting and hauntingly beautiful you write with such a gifted grace... each new poem of yours is more awe inspiring than the last... wonderful,lovely work. take care, jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Amazing, indeed, Claire! Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh, my gosh ! You are something else. This is such a poignant piece of you. 'Release the sands of sorrow to the flow of freeing foam Each grain, a sharp reminder of the hauntings I have known' 'In a rush of gushing current rolls its crimson 'cross my heart' Remarkable, poetess ! Just remarkable ! I definitely echo the thoughts of our friends. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
Oh My..........what to say. You are amazing. So full of emotion and inner mystery. I loved the read very much. Jenn |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Holy smokes Claire, this is terrific! Many thoughts you have left in this writing of yours. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Claire, I am still in amazement of this. . . This is my favorite part. . . "Love's lying face, soft smiling eyes, is seldom what it seems" Too often have we looked into the face of love only to see nothing. . . Haunting in its beauty my friend. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Janet Marie, thank you. You always say the sweetest things. Denise, you are so kind, to read and respond to my work. I don't think you've missed one yet! Thank you, sincerely, for all your encouragement. I appreciate it so much. Marge, thank you for the echoed sentiments... love to you tonight. Jenn E., Welcome to Passions and thank you for reading! Bill, it's been ages since I've heard anyone say "Holy Smokes!" ~ and I love it! Thank you for reading, and for your refreshing response. Sven, your words are always so tender...thank you, my friend. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
wonderful. just wonderful. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Your reaches become more expansive with every new post. This one creates the need for will and the will for need at the same time and I shall have to add it to my personal library so I may reflect on it more. Thank you for such wonderful verse. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Effigy, thank you for reading and for your "wonderful" response. Mark, thank you for such a thoughtful response. I'm very flattered that you would put this in your library. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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