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courtney923
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0 posted 2000-08-02 10:46 AM


Struck the match, and shaved my mind
Try to catch me, and I will die
Born on a ledge, passed by time
Shaking at the knees, and I'm falling just to please
Hurricanes forever, like dirt in my eye
Traveled into darkness, and I can't see here
Got a dagger in my heart, and a tear on my lap
Shooting up the memories, so I can drown them in beer
Hoping I will make, for just one year
Racing my thoughts, and I cannot hear
Climbed the wall, but felt the fear
Wicked displacement, lost in the basement
Hanging out with those, that live in my head
Talking with yourself, may seem out of line
When it's all you got, you do it all the time



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1 posted 2000-08-03 03:37 PM


Very scary poem.   Maybe you should post them in Dark Passions instead of this forum.

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

allan
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2 posted 2000-08-03 04:07 PM


I was thinking of Dark Passions too. Some of these lines are devastating. And the first line,

"Struck the match, and shaved my mind"

is a beaut!  

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