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Marge Tindal
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0 posted 2000-08-02 08:17 AM



On Light Of Day
~*Marge Tindal*~

On light of day
in soft array
you come to lay
across the very
thread of me

Gently showing
with the knowing
simply flowing
over me

Ever breaking
light of making
giving - taking
warmth of thee

Gently quaking
new thoughts making
softly waking
the soul of me


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


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Jenova
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1 posted 2000-08-02 08:24 AM


Wow, what a flow! =) You're definitely gifted... judging from what I've read of you so far... well, that ain't much *feels ashamed*, but I just joined... so I'm looking forward to read more of your things... beautiful.

Ah, there was just one thing: I always stumble over the 4th and 5th lines... they seem so out of rhythm, what do you want to express with this? Do you? *wonders*

Love
Jenova

Sudhir Iyer
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2 posted 2000-08-02 09:55 AM


Smooth as silk it flows... Marge..
regards,
sudhir

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3 posted 2000-08-02 02:27 PM


Beautifully done, Marge!
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4 posted 2000-08-02 03:05 PM


Jenova~
Oxymoronically you stated -

quote:
'Wow, what a flow!'
'I always stumble over the 4th and 5th lines... they seem so out of rhythm,what do you want to express with this?'


I said -
quote:
'On light of day
in soft array
you come to lay
across the very
thread of me'


'Scuse me ? ?
I write 'em ... you read 'em !
Interpretation is left entirely up
to your good taste and judgement.
Let it take you where it will.

Welcome to Passions.

Sudhir~
Thanks for recognizing the silken threads !

Martie~
Thank you, my sweet friend.
~*Marge*~



~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


JulieAnn
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5 posted 2000-08-02 03:18 PM


This flowed beautifully......I loved it...I haven't been around to reply lately...Been busy job hunting.....but i will be around from now on...wonderful peice here.....

Julie :)



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6 posted 2000-08-02 03:22 PM


Marge,

     You have such a talent!  I always like reading your poems and this one was no different    Loved the flow.

                    rosepetals25

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7 posted 2000-08-02 04:51 PM


Wow, Marge! There I go again, just saying "WOW!"  This is one of your best, a masterpiece, hon!

Corinne

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8 posted 2000-08-02 06:01 PM


Ahhh so lovely Marge, nothing better than that soft morning light.  Bonnie
Meadowmuse
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9 posted 2000-08-02 06:34 PM


Marge, our tender weaver, this is so sweet.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau


Janet Marie
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10 posted 2000-08-02 07:08 PM


On light of day
in soft array
you come to lay
across the very
thread of me

Gently showing
with the knowing
simply flowing
over me
===================

simply exquisite words...
"across the very thread of me"
what an amazing line that is..truly
beautiful poem Margie-gator
your talent shines in it along with the morning sun
jm



There are places inside our souls -
that have never been touched.
There are places inside our hearts -
that need to be loved this much.
~jm~


Marge Tindal
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11 posted 2000-08-02 07:25 PM


JulieAnn~
Have missed you ... glad you dropped by.
Good luck with the hunt.
Thank you, hon.

RosePetals~
Thank you for the very sweet reply.

Corinne~
You are just the 'WOW'ingest lady I know.
Thanks gal.

Bonnie~
Bless you - you are a sweetie.

Claire~
Ahhhhhh !  Doesn't surprise me that you
picked up the threads !
You're a doll.

JanetMarie~
If *HUGS* have wings ...
Open the window - mine's flying in !

*Love to you.
You indeed know me sooooooo well !
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


Lone Wolf
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12 posted 2000-08-02 07:40 PM


Marge~

Lovely my friend.  Soft and sweet.  Just like you!!

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Denise
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13 posted 2000-08-02 08:33 PM


Beautiful, as always, Marge!  

Denise

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14 posted 2000-08-02 08:45 PM


Laying rose petals at your feet here...

Karilea
When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ

Marge Tindal
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15 posted 2000-08-03 12:20 PM


LoneWolf~
Oh ... you know I appreciate you.

Denise~
Thank you.
I popped into the Corner Pub and
caught your post.

Karilea~
That's what that lovely
fragrance is !
I thank you, my friend.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


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16 posted 2000-08-03 01:57 AM


Yet another beautiful piece from you, Marge. Thank you for sharing it with us.

"We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde
"The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea

Marge Tindal
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17 posted 2000-08-03 07:48 AM


LoveBug~
So pleased you enjoyed it, sweetie.
Take care, my friend.
~*Marge*~


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


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