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bsquirrel
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0 posted 08-01-2000 09:07 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for bsquirrel

A man lies in bed,
His plastic rosary casting green lights
On his cup of honey-lemon tea.

The sunlight casts its weight,
But he won't move from its heat.
He sweats his soiled sheets.

His right eye feels sore.
Like it has seen exactly enough
To be useless and bruised.

He breathes in careful strokes,
Coughs at the clockless wall,
The silence, the warmth.

Poetry is his church.
Words are his vices as well as his help.
He pens one more in his head.

"A pillow is your best friend.
You can fight with it; it will never harm.
You can whisper to it; it will keep your secrets.

"It keeps your knees cushioned in prayer.
It doesn't mind when it ends up on the floor
When you've made love.

"It stays as your life reaches its top;
Holds you as you fall apart,
Gently, just as slowly, to gears.

"Always soft, the pillow collects you.
You lose yourself in pieces, you see.
If you wash it enough, you will be gone.

"Finally gently holding your head
As you worry and are afraid.
With it, you are with someone."

He finds he can't open his eyes.
Hot light like a bright spill in the sky,
Like words.



[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (edited 08-01-2000).]
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Kit McCallum
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1 posted 08-01-2000 09:13 PM       View Profile for Kit McCallum   Email Kit McCallum   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kit McCallum

I enjoyed this Mike!  Very beautiful thoughts in this verse ... I don't think I'll ever look at my pillow the same way again!  

Best wishes,
/Kit
Janet Marie
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2 posted 08-01-2000 09:20 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

Poetry is his church.
Words are his vices as well as his help.
He pens one more in his head.

"A pillow is your best friend.
You can fight with it; it will never harm.
You can whisper to it; it will keep your secrets.

"It keeps your knees cushioned in prayer.
It doesn't mind when it ends up on the floor
When you've made love.
==========================
oh i do so love looking at the world thru your  poetic eyes...
awesome work here mike, really special.
bs/jm
ma miller
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3 posted 08-01-2000 10:22 PM       View Profile for ma miller   Email ma miller   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for ma miller

always unique -- always a good read ... love your work, bsquirrel ...
bsquirrel
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4 posted 08-03-2000 02:45 AM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Kit,
Thank you. I wrote this one after staying home sick from work. I went to the Target up the street, bought a vaporizer and a copy of Sixth Sense, since I haven't seen it yet. Well, for some reason, the scene where Haley Joel Osment is lying in bed in the hospital, got me thinking about pillows, and how you're born on one -- you end your life on one; it's always there, throughout your life even when nothing else is stable. Even when you're dead, when you're in your coffin, your head will be on a pillow. I had to use that thought in poem form.

Janet,
Thanks.   Glad you liked it, and thanks for calling it special -- it's definitely spiritual to me.

MA M,
Glad you enjoyed; and thanks for your praise.

Mike
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5 posted 08-03-2000 02:51 AM       View Profile for jennie may*   Email jennie may*   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jennie may*

Wow- I love the way good poets can take a simple object like a pillow and make a whole story out of it.  I chuckled at this line:
"It doesn't mind when it ends up on the floor/When you've made love"  Very sweet.
And you closed the poem very well. Like the last line.  Good piece.


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6 posted 08-03-2000 11:07 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

Loved this one, Mike...and you too...get well, m'friend.
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Always soft, the pillow collects you.
You lose yourself in pieces, you see.
If you wash it enough, you will be gone.

Oh, I do like the way you write!!  I am now going to go kiss my pillow.
Sudhir Iyer
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8 posted 08-03-2000 02:16 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

A very well written poem indeed...

regards,
sudhir
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9 posted 08-04-2000 10:58 AM       View Profile for Meadowmuse   Email Meadowmuse   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Meadowmuse's Home Page   View IP for Meadowmuse

Hi Mike, how did I miss this? I get here so sporadically, it's hard to keep up. I enjoy the way you've placed the poem within the poem, giving this piece layers to explore.

"With it, you are with someone" ~ this line, in particular, pulled me close.

Hope you're feeling better, my friend.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

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very cool write
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11 posted 03-10-2008 10:32 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

I miss you my old friend.
Earl Brinkman
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12 posted 05-30-2010 08:10 AM       View Profile for Earl Brinkman   Email Earl Brinkman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Earl Brinkman

An interesting read that stands out from other poems.
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13 posted 05-30-2010 02:36 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Yes it does, and where the heck are you?  LOL, I miss reading your work, so get back in here.
 
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