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He should Feel what I Feel
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He should Feel what I Feel |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London 
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He should Feel what I Feel ~~~ Standing by the window one morning blankly staring down the lane Deep in ponder waking up Fresh brewed coffee steaming hot When suddenly I saw it ... but through the rain my vision wasn't clear So with eyes blinking I stepped closer and wiped condensation from the pane A nose pressed to the cold damp glass brought a shocking apparition from the past It struck an arrow through my heart with ghostly pain Coffee splashed upon the floor as I hastened toward the door the pound of clapping thunder in my chest Fumbling blindly at the lock slid it back and turned the knob Raw desperation put sagging hinges to the test Racing frantic through the rain wildly screaming out her name tires spun as drunken driver sped away There I sobbed upon the ground two hands ... gripped mud and nearly drowned Naught before me but a memory gone insane ~~~ Dedicated to a friend who lost a loved one to a drunk driver ... |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh my gosh Rex ... so powerfully written! You've expressed your emotions and desperation clearly in this difficult topic. I'm so sorry for this loss ... take care ... Warmest wishes, /Kit |
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T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
that was so sad!!...what a twist at the ending...AMAZING... keep it up Gramps!!!  < !signature-->- time grabs you by the wrist directs you where to go so make the best of this test and don't ask why it's not a question but a lesson learned in time [This message has been edited by T McCoy (edited 08-01-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
powerful imagery here Rex .. edged with a chill as it builds to the end... excellent writing well done dedication.. such a loss is unacceptable take care jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very sad, Rex. Such a pity. Well written. Denise |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
I think through your pain and sadness you have given so people something to think about. There is a wonderful message in here my friend. Thank you for that. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Kit, Tony, Janet, Denise, Marina ... thankyou all for responding to this ... after listening to a friend tell of this ... I felt the need to write about it |
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sosweet82 Junior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 17Phoenix, AZ |
That had me in tears. That could not of been wrote in a better way. You have a great deal of talent. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Rex~ I can feel that this one is very personally felt from your heart. The tragedy is played out on far too many lives ... the memories do not stop. Thanks for this tender touch. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
As you know Rex, I can well relate to this one  |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Rex, this is riveting writing, my friend. ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
sosweet ... sorry ... didn't mean to make anyone cry Marge ... thanks for your kind understanding Ruth ... hope I didn't stir up too many sad memories ... I'm sure you can relate to who this was directed towards ... unfortunately they probably read only lables ... why can't this be printed on booze lables ? Claire ... thankyou ... we must 'endeavor to persevere' |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
exceelently written. wow amazing piece "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
thankyou Brian ... you're very kind |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Rex* This is so tragic...I hated to get to the end because I knew it would hurt.....and you know it did. I'm so sorry that you felt the pain of a drunk driver....your writing was excellent~ |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Rex my God you have written a very descriptive piece here! Made my heart pound as well. Excellently written m'friend! What a sad, sad story though. I'm sorry anyone has to deal with pain like this. <*\\\>< The will of God will never lead you, where the grace of God cannot keep you. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Butterflies_dont_cry ... WhtDove ... unfortunately poeple have to deal with this every day ... the nightmares don't quit and neither do the drunk drivers |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
That you were a witness to a tragedy such as this only allows me to believe that miracles will come from it, someday... the imagery left an impact... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I hope so Karilea ... I hope so |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
once more through the gauntlet }>{{{{o> |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Oh! this is so powerful, and gripping. If it were a picture, I'd stand and stare, with true amazement.This is so astounding, I'm struck dumb............. Bravo, you have a gift, and thanks for sharing. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
This is one huge pouring of emotions stirred by a tragic event... very excellently put to words... Thanks for sharing... regards to you Rex, Sudhir |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Marsha ... you are a treasure ... thankyou  Sudhir ... a poem to mark this event is the least I could do ... I want to do more ... just not sure what ... or where to start thanks for your kind support Rex |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Rex.... Every reply that has been made here has echoed my thoughts, also. I know we can't undo the past, but we can stand together with support in this one. I wish you peace.... to go along with friendship....< !signature--> Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! [This message has been edited by Sunny1 (edited 08-11-2000).] |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
thankyou Sunny ... your support means a lot |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
you've caught me in a very mellow mood...so this powerful display of emotions brings many of my own to the rise.. ~~soft hugs for your friend and to you for being one Maureen |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Rex Allen...that you can write for a friend is wonderful...that you show such pain and horror so tenderly is beautiful...I can only offer a shoulder and an ear if you feel the need |
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JnR4eva Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 377Bronx, NY |
Full of expression is what your poem is. And as one person has already claimed, you have painted a perfect picture of that scenario...I felt as if I saw the car driving away myself...this is an exceptional poem |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Suspense in every line, and then the ending of what he would find. This one really pricks the heart. Deb BloomingRose |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Thankyou Maureen ... much appreciated Paula ... thankyou for the offer ... that's very kind of you JnR4eva ... thanks ... I guess I got carried away emotionally Deb ... it was meant to do just that ... hopefully it might get read by some people that might decide to leave their car at home when they go out on the town ... Least I hope so |
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