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Roller Skating In Deep Sand (song)
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Roller Skating In Deep Sand (song) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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I know it's time to play my hand Oh I'd love to be your man. You're the venus of my dreams You're a rockin romance queen. You're as different as the days sometimes sun sometimes rain. You're a soft and gentle dove You're the reniasance of love. Chorus: I'd like to say the things I feel but my tongue is tied my lips are sealed, gettin nowhere's where I am like roller skating in deep sand. I know I'd love to stroke your skin I'd love to kiss your impish grin. You're upbeat a spinning wheel a heart's gamble that turns real. You're the topping on the cake the sweet frosting I can taste. A flower blowin in the breeze the scent of beauty that I need. Chorus: I'd like to say the things I feel but my tongue is tied my lips are sealed. Gettin nowhere's where I am like roller skating in deep sand. Wrote this at lunchtime today watching a small child trying to roller blade in a yard across the street. When he got off the pavement he had such a time. Trying to put some music to this tonight. |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
ethome.... Loved it, all the way through! Especially liked the chorus..catchy!! What genre is this going to be in? Would make a good fast blues, with a thumpin' bass and heavy drums!! Good work, fellow song-writer!!! ~~ To Live is to Give ~~ |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
I think these words will make great song lyrics. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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T McCoy Member
since 2000-07-24
Posts 186 |
...roller skating in deep sand...i like that! ...you sure got the lyrics in place... ...are you like me? is the music harder than the words? just curious... Tony - time grabs you by the wrist directs you where to go so make the best of this test and don't ask why it's not a question but a lesson learned in time |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Very well put together! Good luck with the music!  ~ Claire Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh I like the words Ethome, they're catchy! I can't begin to fathom putting things to music though ... that I am lost on! Great work, and good luck with the tune side!Best wishes, /Kit |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Sunny I don't quite know yet but I am working on it with a friend, thanks again. Thanks Prometheus for the words of confidence about the lyrics. Yeah T. McCoy I am like you. I have this terrible tendency to write the words before the music and then I am faced with the problem of making a melody to fit the words. Thanks for your comments. Thank you Meadowmuse I hope I can put something together that will fit properly. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wonderful words to the music I heard in my mind while reading it...especially love the chorus...Well done! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and I'd pay money to hear ya sing it my friend... love this E, and the moment of inspiration you shared made it even sweeter perfect. later-poet-gator jm |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
The words are great, especially the chorus. Lunchtime well spent |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Kit.. the rest will come, the music I mean. I will take a lot longer creating that than the words. Thanks Martie I might have to email you to get some ideas about that music running round in your mind. Thanks JM you are such a breath of fresh air on a Tuesday eve. I would'nt charge you a dime to hear the final production. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks so much Eloise for stopping in for the read. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
I can dance to this. never say never |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Paula please have a good dance.. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
did you get the music to it? |
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