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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2000-08-01 01:31 PM


     Oblique                                                                            
I cannot stop
These thoughts of floss
Like unkept beards
Of Spanish moss.

Moving my mind
Fruitful of guile
If ocular
Would make you smile.

Pop corn hot born
Sputters spawning
Breakfasts with me
Every morning.

Lunch pail of dreams
Filled to the brim
Harbors the day
Of status quo grim.

Yet, I hear dogs bark
And the cats meow
But they sound different
In the mundane now.


© Copyright 2000 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2000-08-01 01:39 PM


Quite visual, this, esp:

"Like unkept beards
Of Spanish moss."

Excellent!



Karilea
When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2000-08-01 02:59 PM


Thank you my ray of Sunshine. *L*
Sunnyone
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3 posted 2000-08-01 03:23 PM


Hi Seymour...
             Now I know for sure that I am
    going to hungrily read every morsel you
    write!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

       (What did it was the spanish moss,
        and the popcorn!!! Love them both!!)

               Great, great job, y'all!



~~ To Live is to Give ~~


ma miller
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4 posted 2000-08-01 03:35 PM


great poem, Seymour ... love simplicity and this does it right ...
Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2000-08-01 07:47 PM


Sunny1,
Thanks for the great.

MA Miller,
Nice comment, thank you.

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