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MMoonchild
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0 posted 2000-08-01 10:54 AM


Dent de Lion


There you were, golden maned
popping up everywhere I looked
as I leaned back yesterday,
enjoying the warmth of an after rain.

Drawing me to you, I plucked you
from the meadows, beside the stream
brushed you lightly against my cheek
surprised at your softness,
and how delicate you really were.

All my life you were but a weed
though cosmopolitan, and to some
an herb, producing a dandy wine
to drink or as is, edible to feast upon.

I eyed you, held you, played with you
studied your strong stem
your little hairs, fine tuned
breathed in scent of sweetness.

Why was I so surprised...
sensing your want of acceptance?
Yesterday, you received mine.
I kissed you with my lips and you
left your tracings of gold upon them.

A weed no more, I see the beauty in you.

M
4*2k





© Copyright 2000 Maureen - All Rights Reserved
Mark Bohannan
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since 2000-06-21
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In the winds of Cherokee song
1 posted 2000-08-01 11:10 AM


Now you have gone and made me feel guilty for all the weeding I have done.   Wonderful vision you rest upon what most ignore. Great read.
MMoonchild
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2 posted 2000-08-01 11:26 AM


Mark I am still working on that heart..I had a very bad day and a half so I couldnt  concentrate..also..I wrote this  in the spring  and it was the first day after  many rains and the sun was out and I went and sat on my sisters porch waiting for her..shut my eyes then opened to see one  dandelion standing tall....I went over and picked it and   stared at it  and studied it closely then shut my eyes and dreamed a bit then had to run to the car for a pad and pen as this flowed out of me.....I have another   from that day  I will post..but have to look it over first to make sure it is appropriate for here then I will complete your heart for you
~~soft smiles
Maureen

Mark Bohannan
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In the winds of Cherokee song
3 posted 2000-08-01 11:31 AM


Maureen--honestly...forget the heart.  The format it is in now actually lends to the piece a little as I have been shown.  I appreciate your dedication to this but it really is not worth the time and effort.  The words were heard and that is what is most important...not the graphics. Thanks
Professor Gloom
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of Depression
4 posted 2000-08-02 07:48 AM


I tend to disagree with Mark Bohannan to a degree, presentation is part of the overall enjoyment. Ask any chef, they'll tell you that is correct for cooking, and it applies to poetry as well.
MMoonchild, a fine piece of open poetry.

Gloom

MMoonchild
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5 posted 2000-08-02 01:40 PM


thank you Gloom for your professional opinions

~~softly  thinking
Maureen

[This message has been edited by MMoonchild (edited 08-03-2000).]

poutprincess
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since 2000-07-06
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Perth, Western Australia, Australia
6 posted 2000-08-02 01:48 PM


the dandelion filled my childhood days...always found it beautiful and very glad to see someone turn it into such a lovely poem!
MMoonchild
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7 posted 2000-08-03 12:38 PM


poutprincess...that  particular  beautiful day  the dandelion up close was really quite beautiful and it's design fascinated me...a very unique flower of sorts
~~softly thanking you for the visit and words
Maureen



[This message has been edited by MMoonchild (edited 08-05-2000).]

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