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Zion
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since 2000-07-23
Posts 33
Melbourne Australia

0 posted 2000-08-01 09:38 AM


Do you feel the tremble in the air?
Have you seen the time rush bye
Why do the people in their cars seem so slow?
Where do they go?
Some with frowns upon their brows
Their eyes down turned
Many more with smiles upon their lips

Stop I cry slow the rush
What has caused this rift in time?
Look at the children they frolic and run
Enjoy their freedom join their game

Hear the glee the shrieks of delight
Hear the breeze and see the wind
It sways the trees, ruffles the grass
Can you feel its soft touch on your face?

Stop tarry for a time
Smell the flowers see the bees
Take of your shoes let the sands of times go bye
Walk in the water feel the touch on your toe
Look do you see the fish as they flit in the flow

Shade your eyes watch the glitter of light
As it dances and sparkles across the waves
Warm is the sun hold out your hands and breath
Open your eyes to the wonders you will see

Now do you know that the children you see?
They are you and I


© Copyright 2000 Zion - All Rights Reserved
littleC
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 21

1 posted 2000-08-01 12:02 PM


What a joy to read!  

littlC

Tess
Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288
Australia
2 posted 2000-08-01 12:07 PM


Its true...time flies too quick.  


"Life is like music; it must be composed by ear, feeling, and instinct, not by
rule."~ Samuel Butler ~


Paula Finn
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since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546
missouri
3 posted 2000-08-02 02:46 AM


Zion...even tho I knew what to expect this is so awesome

never say never

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
4 posted 2000-08-02 02:53 AM


Very good writing...people sure do get caught up in their everyday life without taking time to enjoy the beautiful gifts we have been given to enjoy.  You make some real good points here and do it with a nice poetic style.
poutprincess
Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735
Perth, Western Australia, Australia
5 posted 2000-08-02 05:48 AM


this is very nice....we all should take time out and just "breathe" in life.....i enjoyed this very much!
Zion
Junior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 33
Melbourne Australia
6 posted 2000-08-02 10:05 AM


all I can say is thank you all I never expected this poem to be liked as much as it seems to have been
Paula Finn
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missouri
7 posted 2000-08-07 02:16 AM


Came back for another read back to the top

never say never

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26
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displaced
8 posted 2004-05-02 08:16 PM


nice write
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