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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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I love you like a flower wilted waiting patiently the droplets of your rain dry-mouthed and alone in ghostly darkness, my only comfort is the soft pearly lustre of the moon oh how it resembles the milk of your skin, the proud glow within flame-driven eyes of you I ache to be the hand that bathes you within her light, the kiss that drinks the crush of your breath but alas, I'm merely a petal fallen Angel of Darkness 1/8/2000 |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
this really messed me up in a good way at the end loved it all the way through i did great job dark gal |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
oh how it resembles the milk of your skin, the proud glow within flame-driven eyes of you ... but alas, I'm merely a petal fallen .... Ah! Angel of Darkness.... What surreal beauty, and what pleasure this poem brings to this reader.... Ah! the pangs the ache is so much felt... Wonderful, regards, Sudhir |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LittleDarkAngel~ How gently you fall ... petal of delight. Luciously lovely. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
Ah the black rose which grows in the darkness is made more beautiful by the absence of the light. My precious petal blown on th breeze never stopping to see who loves thee On and forever you travel from me My pecious petal riding the winds and seas From beauty have you come The Rose in the garden of the night To beauty you will find in the garden of light Yet still you gently travel on the breeze Stop a minute, take a breath, and see the love in me Oh Danny boy, the pipes, the pipes are calling From glen to glen, and down the mountain side The summer's gone, and all the roses falling 'Tis |
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EWDrake Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 183NC, USA |
Dark Angel, This is a touching verse, makes one see your craving so clearly. I love the imagery...more... *S* Evan Drake |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Has a forlorn sensuality that makes me want to take away the longing and be the moistness in the kiss. Wonderful Maree. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
Stunning Maree!!!!! MP |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Magnificent sentiments flow softly in your words Angel of Darkness ... the ache is felt throughout. Beautiful!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
You amaze me! Such delicate longing in this beautiful poem! Lovely!  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Walt, well I'm glad it messed you about thats a lovely compliment Thank you.Sudhir, it is lovely to know that this poem has brought you pleasure Thank youLittle Margey, gently does it hey ? Thank you for you lovely reply Poe , thank you so very much EWDrake, thank you for yourlovely comment Oh Jamie, what a beautiful reply, Thank you my BFF MP, thank you my dear friend Kit, thank you so very much Sharon thanks sweetie so very much for your lovely reply |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
DA, Beautiful my friend. The end was fabulous . . .loved it. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Girl this was absolutely stunning! Awesome!!! psst, ya know what that dry mouth is from don't ya?   hehehehe<*\\\>< The will of God will never lead you, where the grace of God cannot keep you. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dark Angel-- the emotion in this is so real I can almost touch it...This is a wonderful poem...truely awesome!! Your poetry is a growing thing! |
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courtney923 Junior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 43 |
I'm loving it! A creative work of art flowing across the light of my screen. |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Dark Angel, This little peice is so lovely, I must put this one in my treasure chest. You are more than a petal here, you are a POET, thank you so much for this awesome poem. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
LW, Thanks so very much dear glad you liked it.WhtDove, Thanks hon... ummm errr noooo I don't know what the dry-mouth is for lol enlighten me hehe Martie, thank you so very much for your lovely compliment WOW Courtney, thank you Cerenity, *big smiles* Thank you so very much |
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Kellsue Member
since 2000-05-06
Posts 210Waukesha, WI USA |
I love the images this poem provides! Such a wonderful work of art!! ~Kelly  You can give without loving but you cannot love without giving There is no danger of developing eye-strain from looking on the bright side of things |
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