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The Weight of the Stone
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The Weight of the Stone |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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An obelisk To the sky Raised up by Bald heads With pinkish hues Men with might Hieroglyphics A code of ethics In tongues Wistful spite Here they would Praise the all Their deeds Their works Forever good And they will look To the sky That each Has under stood. The tongue The bone of force Stabbing from The shaky ground It’s sun-dried Bleached A hundred men One of each Coo and cluck Its unknown And yet this They’ve made In the image Of their own [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 08-01-2000).] |
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DiscordantNote New Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 9Texas |
Heavy, worthy of more than one reading if one is to understand, and grasp it's full import. "Things get complicated when you get past eighteen, and the further past eighteen you get... the more complicated they become". |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
walt, this is awesome, an incredible scene you've portrayed here...with undertones that question the beginnings of belief...deep, I enjoyed this much. [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 08-01-2000).] |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Depth is only a synonym to the weight of this poem... Walt... back to your deep-thought-provoking moods are you??? well carry on, I am enjoying each bit of it... regards, sudhir |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanx guys moody lately oh yuh! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Walt, this is really Great! I enjoyed it muchly, Excellent my dear  |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
W.O.W.* I had to get on my "deep" glasses to read this  Great writing, with some very powerful thoughts, I liked it alot...yuh I did |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
The think I like most about your poetry is that I never know what to expect when I open it... could be light, heavy, deep, funny, all of the above.... but it's always good... without fail...  |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thank you much miss angel butterfly and nan woowoo i try tuh be mister versatile i wanna learn more more to get better better |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
A wonderful and thought-provoking read Walt! I too enjoy never knowing what mood I will find behind your pen ... enjoyed this immensely! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Great poem, Walt...enjoyed it very much! |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Walt, it is too late for my brain to understand this so I am filing this in my library. Great poem needs a few more reads. "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Walt~ Wouldn't it have been something to actually have SEEN it being built ? Next best thing ... reading this account. You did a wonderful job with this piece, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
kit martie marge and brian big smiles yuh yuh |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Wow Walt...this took me a couple readings to grasp...definitely deep and extremely well written. Keep up the deep thinkin, I enjoy reading what becomes of it! *Krista Knutson* "You never lose by loving. You always lose by holding back." -Barbara DeAngelis |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
In this place where you are today, we hold your hand and wonder why. Tomorrow will give you peace. (this was a message just for you Walt).. about the poem..amazing! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Hello FV venturer...lol... there are some groovy groovy bits here, and this really grabbed me: The tongue The bone of force Stabbing from The shaky ground It’s sun-dried Bleached This is awesome Walteeeee...  and pats on backs etc....K |
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